People can become successful with many ways. Either they try novel idea and take risk expert some field that they do know well. In my opinion, I prefer to do something new and face new problems to reach my goals.
To begin with, many successfull person have prove that try new things make him or her become famous in the world. For example, in technology field, the famous Bill Gates. Bill Gates is the founder of Microsoft. He try to make software instead of hardware which most of the technology companies in that year make it. Also, he took step further when he decided to drop out from his college. Another example is Jeff Bezos. He revolutionized commercial industries by get out from conventional transaction into internet based. He knew that there is no future in that field since many companies tend to sell their products by opening physical stores. However, he realised that why the products is not sold in the internet so it would make easier to customer to buy it.
Next, try new things give signifcation impacts to people career. Nowadays, many workers stack in their career since they do not adapt to new environment. They still feel comfortable in their comfort zone which make them lazy to learn new things. Younger people who always try to do new ideas eventually get promotion quicker. For instance, I have friends who always try search another insight to improve their job. He only search it in Youtube or Google. Therefore, his boss satisfied with his work so right now he becomes a manager in regional region. He manages many workers who is older than him.
Last, taking risk will make people know how to face some problem for the next time. Also, it will helps them tackle related problem too. Many bussinesmen has become an experts because they know how to solve that problem.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 45, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'proved', 'proven'.
Suggestion: proved; proven
...egin with, many successfull person have prove that try new things make him or her bec...
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Line 3, column 215, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'tries'.
Suggestion: tries
...l Gates is the founder of Microsoft. He try to make software instead of hardware wh...
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Line 5, column 424, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'searches'.
Suggestion: searches
...r insight to improve their job. He only search it in Youtube or Google. Therefore, his...
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Line 7, column 99, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'help'
Suggestion: help
...roblem for the next time. Also, it will helps them tackle related problem too. Many b...
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Line 7, column 166, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an expert' or simply 'experts'?
Suggestion: an expert; experts
...roblem too. Many bussinesmen has become an experts because they know how to solve that pro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1494.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74285714286 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3914814809 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587301587302 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.0606388987 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 64.9565217391 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6956521739 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4347826087 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227177987108 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640959794261 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707047722355 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159640758803 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0994756315491 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.62 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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