Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
success is the most pleaser part of our life. being success depend directly on what to do or how much time spend. some people believe that individuals do not succeed ulness take risks and do new things, however, others hold the opposite view. In my opinion, taking risks and daring new things are essential factors to become successful for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that trying new things and taking risks cause everyone to progress financially. Obviously, individuals have low knowledge in different field that cause them to limit their activity. If people dare themseleves and take riks in new things, they can increase activities and carry out several works that lead to get more money. For exmaple, when I was in unversity in Teharn, I, who like challenging myself, just went to class without extra activity. one day, one of my friends recommended me that stock market is the best way to acquire more money beside studying in unversity. After then, I decided to learn required knowledge for arrivaling to stock market. As over time, I could gain extreme profit that help me progressing in my life. This experience teach me that daring people taking riks will be successful.
The another reason is that risks, doing new things, help people to increase their self-confidence. Alwasy, some human resist taking risks in fundemantal issues such as changing job, learning exra knowledge. however, one who try to do new matters will be more successful that lead to rise self-confidence gradually. For instance, when I could attain benefit from stock market, I believed that I did everythings. one else of my friends familired me with new job in famous institution, where teach students how succeed on their arrival exam of university, in Iran. Confidentely, I took risk to do new profession beside stock market and sudying in university in spite of severe pressure. As over time, altough at the beginning I was doutful whether I would take over these tasks or, but I became celebrted person because I could be rich in young age that cause to raise my self-confidence. As you can see, trying new jobs have impact on success of individuals directly.
In conclusion, the most necessary condition being success is that take risk instead of rely on what know how to do very well. Not only does it cause to progress finantially, but also it increase self-confidence. people should dare themeselves to become success .
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to progress' or 'progress'.
Suggestion: to progress; progress
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Message: Did you mean 'progressing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
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...to do very well. Not only does it cause to progress finantially, but also it increase self-...
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...hould dare themeselves to become success .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2031.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99017199017 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8051896214 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55773955774 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.804732278 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3043478261 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6956521739 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52173913043 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288677665003 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0852459355255 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0834008674079 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205503784116 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0752750249888 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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