Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
It is incontrovertibly axiomatic that in today's sophisticated world, education play a prominent role in the life of people, particularly students. Bearing this fact in mind, a heated controversy exists as to whether teacher should be allowed to share their political and social standpoints with the students or not. I am, to great extent, on the belief that teacher should be permitted to share their ideas about different topic with the students for quite a few reasons, among which the most conspicuous ones are substantiated hereunder.
To commence, the first exquisite reason which advocates my viewpoint is the importance of students' awareness about political and social issues. In today's world, with the galloping progress of technologies in different fields such as people's accessibility to different kinds of information on the Internet, students should be acquainted with true and worthwhile information about social and political issues. By making aware students about these subjects, not only they would not be influenced by unrealistic and exaggerated social and political problems, but also they could be able to state their opinions about different subjects, which would pave the way for them to offer their solutions about existing dilemmas in society. Another concomitant efficacy of sharing political and social issues with students has to with the fact that through sharing idea, they could cultivate their social and political information, which would help them in the not too distant future to vote about political issues wisely.
Alongside the first reason elaborated above, the fact that teachers by sharing their information about different topics could establish more friendly relationship with students is another point which requires meticulous attention. The conventional wisdom is that teachers should be able to make a close connection with the students, which may afford a golden opportunity for both sides to be benefited from this friendly association. Accordingly, students would be more enthusiastic to be present in all classes, and teachers would have more convenience in managing class, thanks to friendly relationship between them. Moreover, from the psychological perspective, so profoundly would sharing various information with students affect their attitude towards society that it is not far-fetched to presume that they would feel a great sense of self-esteem and maturity.
Drawing upon the reasons, although there are some exceptions which excluded from the general rule, I do agree that teacher should be allowed to share their ideas about social and political subjects with students. To recapitulate the reasons, not only the true knowledge of students about these issues will increase substantially, but also students and teacher would have a profound relationship in this way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 203, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ct in mind, a heated controversy exists as to whether teacher should be allowed to share thei...
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Line 5, column 686, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'share'
Suggestion: share
...ogical perspective, so profoundly would sharing various information with students affec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2407.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58468677494 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94756000631 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482598607889 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 727.2 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.9910051081 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 185.153846154 100.406767564 184% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.1538461538 20.6045352989 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23076923077 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232081628776 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104301755214 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539719688367 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167429831788 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243382508333 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.4 11.7677419355 182% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 58.1214874552 51% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 10.1575268817 170% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.68 10.9000537634 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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