Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is incontrovertibly axiomatic that in today's sophisticated world, decisions made by government have a momentous role in the people's daily life. Bearing this fact in mind, a heated controversy exists as to whether government should allocate more budget for improving internet access than public transportation. Although it is a little hard to reach a consensus on this issue, I am, to great extent, on the belief that improving internet access should be of paramount importance for allocating budget for quite a few reasons, among which the most conspicuous ones are substantiated hereunder.
To commence, the first exquisite reason which advocate my viewpoint is the importance of internet for people, particularly student. Nowadays, with the galloping progress of technologies in different aspects, more students are depend on the internet in order to pursue their education, because most of them taking online courses. Accordingly, by increasing the internet access in the country, not only could students educate properly and conveniently, but also they would have a great opportunity to conduct research in different fields by using the internet and enjoying different online articles and books, which will pave the way for flourishing of the society. Moreover, people attitudes towards entertainment is changed significantly in comparison with the past; For instance, they much prefer to watch online movies, or to have online shopping rather than going to cinemas and shopping centers . Therefore, the more internet spread in the country, the more people would enjoy their life and would be satisfied from their government.
Alongside the first reason elaborated above, the fact that people's job is crucially dependent on the internet is another point which requires meticulous attention. The conventional wisdom is that extending Internet access in all cities, even in remote areas may afford people a golden opportunity to establish their online career, which will considerably alleviate one of the complicated tribulation in almost all countries, the rate of unemployment. Moreover, From the psychological perspective, people's communication heavily depend on the internet, so people by having a better access to the internet, they would enjoy from cultivating their relationship with their friends and relatives, which would have a monumental effect on their morale. Even though public transportation is one of important dilemma in big cities and need to find a solution for it, hardly could people turn a blind eyes to the great benefits of the internet on their career and daily life.
Drawing upon the reasons, I do agree that the benefits of spending money on internet access take precedence over those of spending money on public transportation. To recapitulate the reasons, by spending more money on internet access, not only students could continue their education with online course, but people have a great opportunity to establish their online job as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
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Suggestion: depended
...in different aspects, more students are depend on the internet in order to pursue thei...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... comparison with the past; For instance, they much prefer to watch online movies,...
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Suggestion: .
...an going to cinemas and shopping centers . Therefore, the more internet spread in ...
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Line 5, column 270, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...cities, even in remote areas may afford people a golden opportunity to establish their...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2528.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48373101952 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02511925203 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505422993492 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 786.6 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.4064070026 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 180.571428571 100.406767564 180% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.9285714286 20.6045352989 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249397984649 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0994103889313 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731783502188 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172612558051 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05989689217 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.8 11.7677419355 177% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 58.1214874552 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 10.1575268817 167% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.1 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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