Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is incontrovertibly axiomatic that in today's modern world, different media performs a monumental role in the people's lives. Bearing this fact in mind, a heated controversy exists as to whether movies and television have more negative impacts than positive impacts or not. Although it is hard to reach a consensus on this issue, I am, to great extent on the belief that this kind of media has more beneficial effects for quite a few reasons, among which the most conspicuous ones are substantiated hereunder.
To commence, the first exquisite reason which advocates my viewpoint is the paramount importance of television on cultural issues. It is crystal clear that in today's hectic lifestyle, people have not enough time to visit museum, art gallery, and cultural exhibition, to name but a few. Accordingly, by watching different social and cultural program on television, not only would they be familiar with the ancient traditions and customs of their culture, but also they would have a great chance to get acquainted with other countries' cultures and traditions, which would pave the way for people to foster their culture and imitate other countries' worthwhile lifestyles. Moreover, students and children could watch the educational program on TV to broaden their knowledge about cutting-edge technologies. Therefore, the magic box has an instructive role in all societies.
Alongside with the first reason elaborated above, the fact that television is a valuable source of entertainments, news, and advertisements is another point which required meticulous attention. The conventional wisdom is that different entertaining programs such as movies and shows may afford people a golden opportunity to get together and enjoy watching their desire programs on television which is one of the convenient and inexpensive type of amusements. Moreover, from the psychological perspective, so profoundly would this issue affect people's attitude towards life that it is not far-fetched to presume that people's relationships with family's members will be cultivated and strengthened effectively. Even though some TV program include violent pictures that have deleterious effects on people’s behavior, particularly children’s behavior, hardly could people turn a blind eyes to the beneficial effects of watching TV shows. In addition, parents could filter many programs displaying violent pictures. Hence, television programs and people's entertainments are inextricably intertwined.
Drawing upon the reasons, although there are some exceptions excluded from the general rule, I do agree that the advantages of television and movies take precedence over its disadvantages. To recapitulate the reasons, not only would people get acquainted with different cultures, but also they enjoy a great source of inexpensive amusements. Consequently, I recommended people to enjoy TV program efficiently with considering not to be addicted to it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 183, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ct in mind, a heated controversy exists as to whether movies and television have more negativ...
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Line 6, column 295, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...ams such as movies and shows may afford people a golden opportunity to get together an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, as to, in addition, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2516.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.69230769231 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21300425254 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552036199095 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 776.7 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.0109711623 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.0 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94117647059 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197162093124 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584443959694 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417276214055 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11856132542 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289971278168 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 58.1214874552 48% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.02 10.9000537634 147% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.01818996416 122% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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