Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is incontrovertibly axiomatic that decision-making process plays a vital role in the lives of people. With this in mind, a heated controversy exists among people as to whether or not today young people are more dependable on their parents for making decision than in the past. Although it is hard to reach a consensus on this issue, I am, to great extent on the belief that the youth of today can better make a proper decision for quite a few reasons, among which the most conspicuous ones are substantiated in the following paragraphs.
To commence, the first exquisite reason which advocate my viewpoint is the effects of the leading-edge technologies in the lives of today people. Nowadays, people have access to wide source of information on the Internet, by means of which they can search their desired/required issue on the Google and be faced with thousands of webpages and comments of people about that subject. In this way, people can evaluate the different aspects of the issue and consider the consequences of their decision by the help of Internet, thus they could reach a decision rationally with minimum uncertainty. In contrast, in the past several decades, people need to confer with their parents and other people so as to reach a conclusion about a decision, which not only make them dependable on others, but also cannot appraise the various facets of the decision exhaustively. Therefore, by such advance technologies today people can make a wise decision without particular depending on their parents.
Alongside the first reason elaborated above, the fact that today young people are more educated than before is another point which requires meticulous attention. It is confirmed that the number of educated people has significantly increased due to the far-reaching influences of progress in technologies on their lives. Accordingly, the young can make logical decisions due to several years of education in modern universities, which not only help them in order to come up with best solutions for their problem, but also make it possible for them to consult with other educated people due to their social interactions. Furthermore, form the psychological perspective, today young people are of the opinion that their knowledge and culture have varied significantly from of their parents, and also the young people think that their friends can better guide them because of profound understanding of the situation.
Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always some exceptions which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree that contemporary young people are able to make decision wisely about their own lives. to recapitulate the reasons, not only would technologies have an important role in the lives of young people and they use these modern application for making decision, but also they are more educated than before, which make them more independent from their parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 166, Rule ID: WHETHER[4]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; whether or not; as to whether
... heated controversy exists among people as to whether or not today young people are more dependable ...
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...fer with their parents and other people so as to reach a conclusion about a decision, wh...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r lives. Accordingly, the young can make logical decisions due to several years o...
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Line 5, column 475, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the best'.
Suggestion: with the best
... not only help them in order to come up with best solutions for their problem, but also m...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
... decision wisely about their own lives. to recapitulate the reasons, not only woul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, as to, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2462.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21610169492 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91854120963 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46186440678 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 772.2 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.6724808805 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 175.857142857 100.406767564 175% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.7142857143 20.6045352989 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.501937898537 0.236089414692 213% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.196950158243 0.076458572812 258% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0988138027133 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.336439051152 0.150856017488 223% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0154944562114 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 11.7677419355 170% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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