Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Technology is the immense source in modern world. Without its presence we cannot think anything. It has become an integral part of our daily life. The effects of technology is hue. According to the given excerpt, technology made our children less creative than in the past. I am pretty sure someone would agree with this statement. But, in my view that stance is doubtable because of the following two important reasons.
The main reason is that in today’s world the availability of technology helps children more up-to-date than in the past time. Most of the children are now using smartphones that is available for internet connection. Now, they are able to learn their answer from different sources. This type of learning helps to build up their confidence level and it also reduce the gap from remote areas to metropolitan areas children. By using internet children reduce the needs of traditional class room setting learning. But, before that technological revolution students were needed to go to the class and they wait for a long period of time for information. For example, I was born in the remote village of Bangladesh. During our childhood, there was no internet and advancement of technology. We need to go to school and depends on the layman and conservative teachers for learning. That was the reason for our lag behind. But now, one tap of click is enough to open a vast sources of required information and teaching materials. As you can see that, internet and technological advancement helps vastly the new generation children than our generation.
Another reason is that, by using internet satiate our children the need of pals to play and ultimately make them autonomous. There are many types of video games and social medias are now available on the internet. Now, the children are adapt enough to pass their time on those media than feeling lonely and depressed. If they wise, they can call their friends, family members and close relatives by video chat. These communication skills reduce the social gap and also saving valuable time. For instance, before the advancement of technology, we were used to visit our relatives house. It was took time and hectic journey to made. We were also using letter to let our relatives situation. It took a huge amount of time to send and get back reply. But, today it is taking a seconds to connect with our relatives and that advantages have been exploited by our children. This experience taught me that, using internet our present generation children close the gap of family relations and make themselves psychologically sound by playing games.
In sum, technological advancement made our children a better and sound individual. This not only will help them to become an up-to-date individual but also psychologically okay human being. For this reason, the boon of technology on our children is unavoidable and there is no room to doubt on that advantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 174, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[6]
Message: Possible agreement error. You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...r daily life. The effects of technology is hue. According to the given excerpt, te...
^^
Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...ps children more up-to-date than in the past time. Most of the children are now using sma...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 357, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'reduces'?
Suggestion: reduces
...d up their confidence level and it also reduce the gap from remote areas to metropolit...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 617, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...o to the class and they wait for a long period of time for information. For example, I was bor...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 237, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'adapted'.
Suggestion: adapted
... on the internet. Now, the children are adapt enough to pass their time on those medi...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 552, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to visiting'.
Suggestion: used to visiting
... the advancement of technology, we were used to visit our relatives house. It was took time a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 594, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...ed to visit our relatives house. It was took time and hectic journey to made. We wer...
^^^^
Line 5, column 772, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a second' or simply 'seconds'?
Suggestion: a second; seconds
...get back reply. But, today it is taking a seconds to connect with our relatives and that ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, as to, for example, for instance, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2446.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 488.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01229508197 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79262607842 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510245901639 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 772.2 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.922342329 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.1212121212 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7878787879 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.15151515152 5.45110844103 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231250694625 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589120270175 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598120319955 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150370122265 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439869482925 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.