People’s ideas may vary a lot when asked about whether telephone has a greater influence on people’s lives than television has. In the past century, the advent of telephone and television has greatly changed our lives, and brings tremendous impacts consistently. Counted as two of the most crucial modern inventions, it is difficult to judge which is more influential. In the long run, however, I’m convinced by the matter that telephone has a greater influence.
A recent survey suggests that the number of telephone holders has reached more than 5 billion at present which means almost every single person gets a telephone on earth. To this tendency, it acts as an conspicuously vital role to facilitate the communication and exchange of people. With the further progress making in technologies of telecommunication, telephone becomes portable and more intelligent. The emergence of Smartphone served as a trigger for an extraordinary revolution in modern world. Taking “iphone”, the most advanced mobile phone currently, as an example, it could combine the functions of taking photos, playing media, watching television, surfing the internet, make navigation and so on in such a tiny piece, which is thus considered to change our lifestyle miraculously. Therefore, not only can telephone promote the liaison between people to be more convenient, now it also provides the latest information and even more comprehensive services.
Compared to the versatile and smart telephone, television appears much less compatible with the fast-rhythm metropolitan life. However, It is leading a cozy and light style which is obviously more suitable for holiday home run.. for example , I often turn off my phone and lie on the couch watching TV for a whole afternoon at weekends, It has become an important leisure way of most people.
In conclusion, it is apparent that television have a significant bearing on people’s leisure time, however, telephone plays a more indispensable role in all fields, nevertheless, it is believed that telephone will be injected into more high-tech elements and become more portable. Accordingly, I’m inclined to agree with the opinion that telephone has a greater influence on people’s lives than television.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28048049226 2.67179642975 123% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597142857143 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.978101716 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.8 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53333333333 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29470718134 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103823917952 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140099166246 0.0737576698707 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196549437137 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128122132256 0.0645574589148 198% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.69 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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