Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The telephone has a greater influence on people’s lives than Television has.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The telephone has a greater influence on people’s lives than Television has.

In the recent past, technological developments facilitate human’s lives. One of them is Television and the ensuing device that was invented is Telephone. I agree with the statement that Telephone has a further greater impact on our lives than Television. We can access the world-wide-web network by the Internet and get the required information from. We can purchase the required merchants by the Telephone or Internet. In the following paragraphs, we discuss the rather importance of Telephone comparing with Television.
First, by the Internet which is based on Telephone, it is available to connect the world-wide-web network in order to get the required information. Without using the Internet, access to the required information is very difficult or even impossible. For example, you can imagine a situation in which a student is going to do a research on a specific subject. He or she needs to find related works that had been published previously. Using the Internet he or she is able to get the required papers simply by searching it on sites that provide services to search.
Second, not only the Internet could be used for getting the information for scientific goals but also to bought and purchase merchants it is a very favorable device. This is because when you purchase through the Internet you can save your time and money. For instance, suppose a situation in which a person needs to save a sit to travel. He or she can do this work both by going directly to save the ticket or can save the ticket by a Telephone call or save On-line by the Internet. In the former situation, he needs to use their own automobile or any transportation device to go to purchase the ticket. This need itself spending time and money than the latter situation.
As a result, the Telephone would lead to facilitate to access the required information and get the required services easier. Moreover, persons are able to do all the things by the internet while they are not able to do all the same things by the television. Therefore, Telephone has played a great role in the human’s lives than Television.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 324, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...ation in which a student is going to do a research on a specific subject. He or she needs ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...tuation in which a person needs to save a sit to travel. He or she can do this work b...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, all the same, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90502793296 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9507468166 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472067039106 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.6425396807 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.8 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174065063177 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583564121441 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854798442783 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116419433374 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0833135238193 0.0645574589148 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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