Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students who keep their rooms neat and organized will be more likely to succeed than students who do not.
Some students prefer to live in a neat and well-organized dorm rooms whereas for others this is not a big deal. In my viewpoint, students who prefer to live in neat and organized rooms will have more chance to succeed in their own future lives. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, living in a neat and organized environment reduces the amount of Adrenalin hormone in the blood. In the past, since there were little studies about the role of Adrenaline in the human body, some destructive effects of this hormone were not well-known. Todays, scientists find that the high level of this hormone in the blood-circulation-system can lead to an appearance of levels of stress in the humans. For example, increasing the amount of Adrenaline in the blood-circulation-system can inhibit the Dopamine-receptors in the plasma membrane. As a result, when the cells are not able to absorb Dopamine from the blood-circulation then the degrees of sadness will appear.
Secondly, students who prefer being well-organized are those who further appreciate their time value. Research shows that those peoples who were able to manage and use their times properly have more chance to follow their own ambitions in the future. However, one must consider the role of endeavor but managing the time play a crucial role in success. For example, my best friend and I decided to prepare ourselves to take the TOEFL exam. These days, he took the exam with success whereas I could not yet prepare myself for that. Properly speaking, since he focused only on their exam he could get the required score while I could not yet. This is because I was not able to focus on the studying due to I was working. This means that I could not manage and properly used time.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that students who live in neat and organized rooms will presumably succeed in the future more than others. This is because living in such places resulted in to reduce the amount of stress and also because they are able to manage and use their times properly.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, second, secondly, so, then, well, whereas, while, as for, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80555555556 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94821037995 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494444444444 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.8386314978 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.1111111111 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237524786909 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802871315123 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111948698944 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167537681379 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0913747830554 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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