Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed
Throughout history, in all civilized societies, the issue of television advertising engendered copious controversies among people. Some people incline toward the opinion that television advertising are essential and children should watch them. However, some other may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that program advertise by television are not suitable for children and parents should hinder their children from watching them. As far as I am concerned, parents should not allow their children to watch advertising of television. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that television advertising has harmful effects on children. Nowadays, the development of technology happen at a very fast pace and this change cause plentiful program on television. Many fast food and restaurant advertise spend money on advertise their junk food on television and also there are many program advertise potato chips and chocolates and when children watch this commercial become interested to them and instead of healthy homemade food, they ask their parent to buy them this junk food. Since, children are not mature they keep asking this foods and force parents to buy it for them and after a while they become addicted to this junks which in a long-term it affect their health.
The second significant point supporting my idea is that television advertisement advertise many violent computer game. Game company do not care about children and advertise this kind of game which children find them attractive. These game have violent and brutal scene in them and affect children’s mind. Because of this game children become aggressive and try to imitate that action. For example, one of my friend insist on his parents to buy him a computer game which he saw in television and after he plays it, he become really angry and he always beat up other children in school. Also, the main character had a sword in that game and use it to kill his enemy and my friend because of that buy a sword and tries to imitate and copy his behaviour.
To wrap it up, it is not proper for children to watch television advertising since it has many harmful on their attitude. Consequently, it is highly recommended that government put restriction and limit on the program that television show them and consider their negative effects on children. In fact, there are myriad of other reasons, challenging above statement, could be mentioned but are not embraced due to the dearth of time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 228, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[4]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun food seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much fast food', 'a good deal of fast food'.
Suggestion: Much fast food; A good deal of fast food
... cause plentiful program on television. Many fast food and restaurant advertise spend money on...
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Line 2, column 342, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun program seems to be countable; consider using: 'many programs'.
Suggestion: many programs
...k food on television and also there are many program advertise potato chips and chocolates a...
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Line 2, column 347, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'programs'?
Suggestion: programs
...d on television and also there are many program advertise potato chips and chocolates a...
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Line 2, column 595, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...hildren are not mature they keep asking this foods and force parents to buy it for t...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...d after a while they become addicted to this junks which in a long-term it affect th...
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Line 2, column 720, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'affects'?
Suggestion: affects
...d to this junks which in a long-term it affect their health. The second significant p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, while, for example, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12980769231 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77216307758 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502403846154 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.453899931 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.555555556 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1111111111 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206525398765 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807491858864 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057423776749 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137890633592 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555146869648 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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