Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people in the world think that television advertising is not harsh things to children, especially in the age range between two to five years, probably, because children learn different styles of language and help to become smarter. I, however, believe that such kinds of marketing are very detrimental to children. There are several reasons why I feel this way, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, more concerned young children especially before the age of five the physiological and psychological transformation, are not capable to think and detect whether what is a good thing or a bad thing. Therefore, their psychological aspects may be sharply influenced. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. My niece, who is at the age of four years, indulged in many advertisements shown on the TV screen. So she is unaware of everything like food, playing, and calling by her parents during the time of watching advertisements on the screen. This behavior made her parents more frustrated and despondent. This clears that allowing such kinds of stuff to the children might make more negative effects on the burgeoning young mind of children.
Second, by allowing to watch such kinds of advertisements, they children become more inactive physically because they are involved in this thing only. For instance, a recently published paper on the internet shows that most children before the age of five are negatively impacted by TV advertisements because this makes them more inactive and not interested to play other physically active games which will be a bad thing in the future for their whole lives. Moreover, many different kinds of diseases may occur in the future, which is the more catastrophic condition for the world.
Third, being imitated by the styles and doing the same things as the models and heroes shown in the advertisement, there may happen many intimidating accidents. To illustrate this, an advertisement about pesticide spraying in the field. My niece mimics the same thing by taking pesticides at home. In this way, this may be very hazardous for the children's health. This also indicates that it is a very intricate thing to stall in society.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that allowing disparate advertising materials on the TV too young children is a more impairing thing for them. This is because it could affect the children (aged between two to five) employing psychologically, physically, and socially.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, third, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2080.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14851485149 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96648269941 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519801980198 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.8169730858 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181329581698 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563197312176 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424996989093 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119775578932 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446753653265 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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