Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without any doubt, advertising that targeted children would have a negative impact on them. Some people believe that television advertising that focused on children aged two to five should be banned while others have a negative attitude toward this issue. As I am concerned, I completely agree with the statement that television advertising for this age group should not be allowed. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on arguments to support my view.
The first point to be mentioned is that by watching the advertisement, children might hurt their health. Children easily influence by advertisement. They cannot realize that what is really what is fake and they tend to imitate the behavior of the characters that they watch on TV commercials or eat everything that advertises on TV. Let’s consider the following examples to illustrate this point. They might get serious injuries because they want to fly like the character of their favorite TV commercial. Or they insist on their parent buy all delicious chocolate for them while these chocolates are really harmful to their health because of the high content of sugar and fat.
Another reason that deserves some words is that due to the immaturity, children have not grasped that whether their parent could afford to buy the interesting things that they encourage to buy by seeing an advertisement or not. They just want to get their wants and they do not care about the economic condition of their family because they do not understand these things at that age. For instance, the company that produces machine toys, with the use of attractive pictures, sounds, and also some characters of popular cartoons makes their advertisements appealing and capture children attention. As a result, they deceive and force their family to buy those expensive toys while they do not need that. And the family have no choice except purchasing those toys.
By the way of conclusion, base on arguments above, I am of the opinion that the advertisement that targets very young children should not be allowed because they are harmful to their health and also children force their parent to buy the things that they do not need and their family have not enough money to purchase their favorite toys.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'buying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: buying
... interesting things that they encourage to buy by seeing an advertisement or not. They...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oney to purchase their favorite toys.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, really, so, while, for instance, as a result, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04812834225 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66185031703 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510695187166 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.6070648783 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.375 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3125 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201760903058 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765333984522 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806800769602 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145523245561 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1113902428 0.0645574589148 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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