TPO13 Q1 Integrated TOEFL Writing

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TPO13 Q1 Integrated TOEFL Writing

The article discussing a fascinating topic pertaining disadvantages of buying fossils to private collectors and provide three reasons of support, however, the professor explains that the negative attitudes that expressed in the article are somewhat exaggerated and opposes each of the author’s reasons.
First, the reading passage discusses that if private collectors sell the fossils, public people lose the chance to view this worthy objects, and suggests that the fossils must be donated to the museum that everyone can visit them. In contrast, the professor provides information that this idea isn’t true. He states that when a collector wants to sell the fossils, they have to display the fossils to public people in order to sell them, as a result, many people exposure to the fossils. Clearly, a disparity exists between the article and the evidence exhibited by a professor.
Second, the article pushes forth the idea that selling fossil to private collector brings about that the scientist loses access to important resources of fossils. They also miss out doing some researches about extinct life forms. However, the classroom discussion contends that this point is not real. According to the professor, before fossils sell to a collector, the values of them must be identified by scientific ways and the scientists carry out examination and test on them. Therefore, the fossils pass through hands researchers first. Consequently, we can argue that indeed the claim made in reading unsubstantiated.
Finally, the article mentions that the scientist will miss important evidence related to these fossils because of the private buyers untrained. However, the professor refutes this notion by saying many fossils could not be discovered. In addition, many institutions could not have many fossils without these private owners. So, it is much better for institutions and scientists to get more fossils through these buyers otherwise many fossils will be hidden.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...otherwise many fossils will be hidden.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, in addition, in contrast, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1373.03311258 122% => OK
No of words: 307.0 270.72406181 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4657980456 5.08290768461 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78512867175 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547231270358 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 419.366225166 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.298039666 49.2860985944 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.866666667 110.228320801 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4666666667 21.698381199 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 7.06452816374 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.43796601214 0.272083759551 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145845115605 0.0996497079465 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.095877439373 0.0662205650399 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255926864555 0.162205337803 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0865944147286 0.0443174109184 195% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.2367328918 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 63.6247240618 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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