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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain you

Essay topics: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspapers, magazines, and other media pay too much attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reasons and details to explain your opinion.

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Fame and media are two notions, which always have tremendous connection. I personally disagree with the statement that media pays too much attention to the private lives of famous people. There are a few reasons why I feel this way.
One of the reasons is that it is sometimes crucial to be aware of what particular public figures are. Speaking of recent events in political life of the United States- elections, in order to choose a side to vote for, people had to get familiar with what each of the candidates represented in terms of personality. This way, media served as a source of extensive information for that type of questions. If voters had not known what lives the candidates lived, they would have difficulties to give preference to the one on of the nominees. Although from the ethical point of view it may seems that politicians have the right on private space, society has to be aware of all their affairs in the past. To that end, when people know the way the politician, they want to vote for, lives, they are likely to build more unbiased opinion about the person.
Another reason is that a myriad of celebrities start their careers to become famous. Actors and musicians aim to attract attention of the public in case to excel. Therefore, when the artists launch the professional way, they have to understand that people will be interested in all details of their private life. If press or other media are not willing to know more about a celebrity, it is doubtful that he is really noted. Even if some public persons claim that media is very extensive in their desire to reveal celebrities` personal mystery, they have to be grateful for that, because it proves their popularity. So, the renowned people have to take for granted media`s meddlesomeness.
To sum it up, I feel that television, newspapers, magazines and other sources of mass information are not extremely obsessive to the famous people`s life. This is because they enable society to understand them better and indicate their glory. All things considered, it is reasonable to assume that media is advantageous for politicians and celebrities.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 669, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...renowned people have to take for granted media's meddlesomeness. To sum it ...
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Line 4, column 358, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ageous for politicians and celebrities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, really, so, therefore, as to, i feel, speaking of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1784.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91460055096 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82492346972 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539944903581 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9354183735 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1111111111 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212006611172 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704224368979 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084109402199 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151874898104 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724805761273 0.0645574589148 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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