Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family.
In today's hectic world, a new technology has penetrated every single facet of our lives day in day out without which we can't even imagine our lives. One of these technologies without which our lives seem to be paralyzed is TV. Stemming from this fact a relevant question that is a moot point is whether TV worsened our living conditions or make it better. Due to the controversial nature of this question, there is not a general agreement on this question. I am, however, to a great extent of the conviction that although television brings different advantages in our lives, it has caused many social problems and drawbacks. In the following paragraphs, some convincing reasons will be delineated to elaborate my personal stance.
To commence with, the relationship among people is of utmost critical importance issue, which brings people close together. Indeed, relationships can not only maintain themselves but also can't be built on a foundation of convenience. Generally phrased, according to a study conducted in our country, watching TV is a sheer waste of time, which make people being away from each other who are important to us. In fact, this situation may have deleterious effects on our relationship and can destroy it, for more often than malicious abuse. To elucidate more on this issue, when we pay attention to each other we breathe a new life into each other. With frequent attention and affection, our relationship flourishes and we as individuals grow stronger. As a tangible example, if people spend their precious time with their family and friends instead of watching television, they will help heal each other's wounds and support each other' strength.
Another reason that should not go unnoticed is that watching TV cause irreparable mental and physical health problems in the long run. To put it in another word, watching television will cause sedentary lifestyle that put people's health into serious danger like heart disease, obesity, diabetes and so forth. Going into the depth, based on various studies done by researchers, do exercise, waking, jogging and many different activities could guarantee people's health instead of watching television. However, TV revolutionized our lives owing to the fact that it has informed people of many things that happen day in day out. In fact, in some case, it provides an opportunity for people to enhance their knowledge in the different realm.
In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that new modern technology such TV has changed our living conditions drastically whether for worse or strength it. Indeed, it could threat our relationships and influence it negatively. Besides, it might have health problems and prevent people from lead a healthy lifestyle.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, so, in fact, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2300.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19187358916 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83624587643 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571106094808 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.7651661875 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.523809524 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0952380952 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2380952381 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0556177376013 0.236089414692 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0164251802001 0.076458572812 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0227100176639 0.0737576698707 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0281083628899 0.150856017488 19% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220897399442 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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