Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
There are lots of new technologies that surrounds us nowadays including televisions, which are very close to us. Every technology has its own pros and cons specifically TVs. I personally believe that TVs has damaged relationships between family members and friends. I think this way because of following reasons.
First of all, TVs make us busy in a way that we cannot keep contact to anybody else. While watching television we try to focus more on programs running in rather than to concentrate to our dialogue. In this case, our started conversation will be lost and most of the time that person, whom we are talking to become nervous and obviously shows anxiety. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Last night my father was talking to my elder brother when his favorite program started in TV. So he embarked to focus on program rather than to my father. After a while when my father saw this situation became angry and shouted on him. In general, watching TV cause us to lose prior duty.
Secondly, spending most of time before TV compels us to talk and explain about programs shown in TV in specific times which we should not. While meeting our friends and family members its very nice to ask their situation and routine instead of speaking about a program, which will reduce the sincerity. In addition, considering the programs and series shown in TVs makes us forget our duties. for instance, we have a classmate that whenever anyone want to talk to him, he starts to speak about movies he had seen in TV and insists to complete his story. As a result, nobody doesn’t want to make contact with him because he forgets to speak politely and kindly. Most of the times he is alone with his cellphone and watching movies.
Thirdly, watching TV programs and movies learn us artless points which sometimes are against our culture. Every country has its own specific type of conventions which maybe in the contrary of other countries’ culture. Most of the time the contents of TVs are not monitored by governments so they try to show immoral contents. In addition, children are likely to learn these kinds of things sooner than old ones. For instance, my cousin uses to see movies a lot specially war and furious ones. Whenever he starts conversation to a stranger, he will not keep his dialogue for a while because he uses unlovely words to attract stranger. In the end he doesn’t have and make more friends due to what he learned from those movies.
In conclusion, I suggest that never try to watch TV for a long time because first it will not let you to make contact with anyone who is near to you and take all your attention, second sitting before TV make to have ideas just about what we see and surely will not help us in making friends and thirdly watching TV a lot will full your mind of unnecessary information which reduce your mutual relationships.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 86, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...we cannot keep contact to anybody else. While watching television we try to focus mor...
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Line 5, column 394, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...hown in TVs makes us forget our duties. for instance, we have a classmate that when...
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Line 5, column 449, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'anyone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...e have a classmate that whenever anyone want to talk to him, he starts to speak abou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in general, speaking about, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2391.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70669291339 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59809709215 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501968503937 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.5961398331 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.64 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.32 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0713028959715 0.236089414692 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0192563243427 0.076458572812 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0227859812374 0.0737576698707 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0451902974607 0.150856017488 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256516928478 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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