TPO 28
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents today are more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today world education is the most important point toward success, and day by day it is escalating. People are not the same as people of hundred years ago. People specifically parents became more educated. In my point of view, today parents focus more in their children's education than parents in the past. following paragraphs fully demonstrate why I think this way.
First of all, as knowledge became the most important part of this world, parents recognized that their children cannot build a favorable life without knowledge, so they concentrate more on their children's education. Furthermore, any technology we see around us and around the world is the result of developing in education. As an example, my grandfather who is an old man now, had not pay attention to my father's education, and even he did not let him go to school. unfortunately, my father is an illiterate person who neither can read nor can write. He has many problems in his life especially in his career. He does not enjoy his life, but he did one extraordinary thing that he led his children (us) to go to school and gain knowledge. he knew that if he will not let us learn education, we will also be like him with lots of problems. Now I and my brother are doctors and server our people which make my father please. this example shows how parents now focus on their children's education.
Secondly, now parents try hard on their children's education that their children will have a better job. Most of parents are now well educated, and are familiar with the working environment. Parents experienced that only by education can gain a high salary job and high positon. There are lots of people who do not have high salary or they work tough jobs. In addition, gaining knowledge will boost people's prestige among other people. My own experience is a compelling example of this. My uncle was a bachelor in computer science, and have an ordinary job with low salary in one company. He always tried hard on his children education. His first child became a doctor, and got his P.H.D from the United States of America. Now he has high income and has a high prestige among people which all people respect him.
In the conclusion, I am of the opinion that parents focus more on their children's education that parents in the past. I think this way because now parents know that only by education can one person build his or her life, and because children will have a better job by studying.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Following
...ens education than parents in the past. following paragraphs fully demonstrate why I thin...
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Suggestion: Unfortunately
...d even he did not let him go to school. unfortunately, my father is an illiterate person who ...
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Suggestion: He
... us to go to school and gain knowledge. he knew that if he will not let us learn e...
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Suggestion: This
...our people which make my father please. this example shows how parents now focus on ...
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Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the parents') or simply say ''Most parents''.
Suggestion: Most of the parents; Most parents
... their children will have a better job. Most of parents are now well educated, and are familiar...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: D
... child became a doctor, and got his P.H.D from the United States of America. Now ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, well, i think, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2027.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68129330254 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59630727398 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478060046189 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5563518955 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.9615384615 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6538461538 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73076923077 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215361702557 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736397347881 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0986384939281 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174067465552 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0719203501481 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.69 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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