Parents today are more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past.
Over the past few years, the issue of whether or not, in the modern era, parents are more engaging in the children’s school process compare to the past has received a great deal of attention from psychologists and education experts. Although some may say that children today become more independent than in the past, so their parents do not involve to their school works. I, as well as many others, believe that because of fundamental changes in the lifestyle, education system and parents are engaging to their children’s schoolwork.
First of all, an important reason why parents are involved in their children education is that have a different lifestyle. In the past, fathers had been worked on their field all the days as a farmer, and mothers had been done home works such as cooking food, washing the dishes and many other similar duties all days so that they would not have time to spend to children’s education. Furthermore, parents had a lot of children more than 5 children in many cases; hence, they could not consume adequate time for all children about school home works. However, today since parents have been working half of a day, which do a job from 7 am to 2 pm, they would have more time than past to spend with children for their school works. Also, in many families, they only have one or two children, so they can consume adequate time for their contrast to the past.
Another reason for this point of view is that the educational system has been changed. In the past, only some children had gone to schools, and an educational system was not proper for all children. Otherwise, in the modern era, all children have opportunities for going to school. Besides, all parents are aware of the importance of education on the future of their children, so they attempt to send their children to school. In other words, since parents know about the importance of instruction, they try to help and support children as well as they can, until offspring will become a prosperous and successful person in the future life. Nevertheless, in the past, parents thought that those children had become a successful person if they would have worked in the garden or agricultural land hardly. As a result, they did not follow the educational process of their children.
In conclusion, considering the ideas presented in the paragraphs above, I personally believe that fathers and mothers are more engaged in the children’s school process compare to the past chiefly due to changes in the lifestyle and education system.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
Over the past few years, the issue of whether or not, in the modern era, parents are more en...
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Line 6, column 744, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had worked'?
Suggestion: had worked
... had become a successful person if they would have worked in the garden or agricultural land hard...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, in many cases, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88888888889 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63545910968 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4375 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.0010964807 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.0 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.45110844103 202% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448092617735 0.236089414692 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.188796070627 0.076458572812 247% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109452129974 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.311528209083 0.150856017488 207% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133615389604 0.0645574589148 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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