Do you agree or disagree with the following statement If people have the opportunity to get a secure job they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

in this era all job providers, organizations and job employers seek to hire the most professional and experts rather than ordinary employees, which result in a wide range of competitions among the people who want to get jobs. these people invariably try to increase their expertise to acquire better jobs, and fully use the chances encounter them. in my opinion, people must get a job when they have the opportunity to get that. Following paragraphs fully demonstrates why I think this way.
To begin with, chances are not always easily available, which ignoring the ready opportunities will result in being jobless. As most of the people are now getting professional, the chances for getting a job is in the lowest degree. if we overlook the job that is ready for us and wait until getting a better one, another person will get that, and we will be jobless for another period. my own experience is a compelling example of this. last year our university give me the chance to work as social worker, but I ignore it as it did not have high salary. I thought with my own that there will be another job if I wait. I waited and waited for a long time but there was not such a job with a high salary, which made me very nervous and took me a lot of time. so I left jobless for a long period due to ignoring the ready job.
Secondly, waiting a long time for the purpose of getting a better job will have a negative impact on our health. ignoring ready jobs and waiting periods of time for getting a better job and will cause serious health problems including obsession and mental problems. As a clear instance, the time I was waiting for acquiring a better job that took three or four months really caused my mental problems and my obsession increased because I thought that I could not find my desire job. the condition was as serious that I obliged to see the doctor and he prescribed me some medicine. after that harsh period that I could find a job, my circumstance really changed and I gained my mental health again.
in the conclusion, I strongly believe that people should take and use available opportunities they have for getting a job. this is because chances are not abundant and are not always ready to use, and because waiting for getting a desire job will take a long time which will have a bad influence on mental health.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, i think, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52718676123 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53474423237 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460992907801 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4033148289 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.789473684 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2631578947 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31578947368 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301568567202 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114658599156 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0805857285423 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214369952209 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487620318681 0.0645574589148 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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