Television while benefitting us with entertainment and education also harms us by the mindless chatter it can display all day long. In recent years, there has been a rise in the number of television people watch during the day. The pandemic in 2020 surely reinforced this statistic, when people were forced to stay at home and consequently watch tv for hours on end and therefore, I would like to agree with the topic. Televisions do destroy communication and the two reasons for me holding this stance are explained below.
Firstly, television has made its way into people’s dining rooms. By this I mean to say that the trend of ‘TV dinners’ has re-entered our lives and is destroying the communication shared between a family during mealtime. For eg: personally, as I was growing up, my family limited the use of television as a way to pass time and instead focused on talking and sharing our experiences of the day during dinner time. Nowadays, we have gotten into the habit of watching tv while we eat, which takes away our focus from the delicious food prepared as well as inhibits our interactions, and restricts them to meager small talk. This has clearly demonstrated to me that television does destroy communication amongst my family, and I would not be too wrong to assume it has done so with others as well
Secondly, school-going children now stay glued to the addictive television screens instead of going out and playing with their friends after school. Children back in the day, were active and healthier because they were exposed to fresh air and vitamin D while getting enough exercise. This helped them grow to their full potential and live a healthy life. Unfortunately, today, children slump their backs and sit too close to the television all day long and this results in poor growth and health issues down the line. Going out to play not only helped us stay healthy but also kept our friendships alive and gave us many opportunities to learn how to communicate with various groups of friends; Consequently, this helped me maintain my friendships; something children in the recent past, lack.
To sum up, I would like to restate that television is doing much harm to the communication between friends and family. Families focus on the television instead of communicating and children stay cooped up inside their homes, preventing them from building lifelong nurturing relationships. Television serves many roles- provides us with information, entertains us, as well as educates us but too much television does us no good and if we want to prevent the ill effects of this device, we need to learn how to limit our use of it.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, i mean, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2210.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91111111111 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80950415203 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562222222222 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.638099082 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.125 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.125 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173888616283 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633619207638 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518061846968 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114979410291 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354358760209 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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