Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people claim that employers tend to implement new working policy in their companies. The recruitment specialists criticize the new working life principles. Employers aim to get maximum profit, so they wait fast working and more productivity from employees. Benefits and drawbacks of this idea have been a controversial issue in the business world lately. Although both sides have several pros and cons, I am of the opinion that business world enforces the employees working quickly and to make mistakes. I will elucidate the details of my support with some tangible details and examples in the following paragraphs.
Many factors contribute to development of business world in many aspects. Employers always want more from employees who are forced to work faster. Technological advances are the major factor speeding up working life. Thanks to this, employees do less mistake in their job. But, there is a human factor which influences working conditions. On the other hand, technology encourages employees to work quickly in a profit maximizing environment. As they work fast, their mistake level and cost can increase in the time.
The business environment has some hard working conditions which affect the employees’ productivity. These are equality and wage level. But, in our world, there is unlimited labor supply which causes employees to worry about losing their jobs. Thus, they do not demand their rights from employers who aim to get higher profit. This causes a vicious circle, such as employee make a mistake and they have a worry about losing job, so they do not tell anything about her fault. But this mistake can result in a high cost. Employers and employee avoid from all this, connect a relation with together. Employees benefits should come first in the business world.
Some people support that technological improvements and devices reduce the risk of errors in our job. Opponents of this argument claim that employees should working fast for maximizing of profit. This is the key factor to continuous growth of companies. However, I am at variance with these statements. There are many business fields in today's world, such as health and education. A health employee has to be careful in her job, because human life is more significant than other conditions. Working speed has nothing to do with profit motive coming first human life. Education is directly related to the development of students and it needs time. Unless you make any mistake, we can see many positive results in the business world.
To sum up, technological improvements affect working life in many aspects. Employers aim to make higher profit, but employee worried about loosing their job. In some work fields, there is not important to work fast, indeed human life and future come to first. Employee rights and benefits is related with employers aim closely. So, on both sides can meet in the middle.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, thus, as to, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2436.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15010570825 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66907772115 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467230443975 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6003584229 170% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.5153575203 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 69.6 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5142857143 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.25714285714 5.45110844103 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223276871686 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0578015356266 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363183501481 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147837465899 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357895653805 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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