University serve as different kinds of purpose to their students. It serve as a school, community, or a stepping step for developing one's career. I believe that extracurriculum activities such as sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries do, so they should receive an en qual financial support.
To begin with, sports and social activities have similar educational effect just like classes and libraries do. After students learn their studies from text and classes, social activities is step when students actually utilize and apply thier knoweldge into real form. For instance, I was a member of zero-waste club in my college and studied ecology for my major. The renewable resources and energy policies I learned during ecogy class inspired me to actively participate for the club. At the club, we made our imagination, our knowledge in to a practical matter. We made some forms of eco-friendly presentation that could be adapted and promoted to our local society, and rebuted against factories wasting
Second of all sports and social activities enhances healthy lifestyles. University students often stay late for preparing their exams, sometimes they get burnt out. Since university life is stressful, some students depend on alcohol, drugs, or even commit suicide. The main reason for this tragedy is the absence of place to rest and release their stress. Sports club and social activities perform a place where students can realease adrenaline and learn how to deal with study overload in a healthy method. Also, social activities connect students and hinder them from being alone and gloomy. So by supporting sport and social activities, univeristy can guide their students to a desirable way. mental health
Last of all, social network from social activities are crucial for success. In this competitive society, there are loads of elites and talented workers. To become competitive in the job market, intimacy between colleagues would be crucial for an employment and promotion. High employment rate of graduates would be an equally important parameter for a good college just as faculty number, number fo allumni, and the size of college. For instance, in many IT companies of Sillicon recruitment is not opened to every candidates. Initial employees of the company recommend their nearby friends or classmates who outstanded and made good performance during university. Since social connection between students would facilitate job opportunities and promotions, supporting the network woule be beneficial.
To sum up, I believe financial support of universty toward sports and social activities is just as important as supporting classes and libraries. This is because sports and social activities have similar educational effect, and could be a healthy guidance, and will prosper university in long terms of view.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, second, so, for instance, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2425.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41294642857 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84151610369 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560267857143 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 767.7 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7982353718 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.041666667 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285906995886 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805756007994 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100952214455 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185775090727 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0776829453673 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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