Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
We are all aware that it is challenging for administrators on how to spend the university budget in a way, which guarantees the best possible outcomes for both students and colleges. In my opinion, I believe that sports and social activities should take equal funding as libraries and academic facilities. I feel that way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First, they are profitable activities that can generate revenue for universities. Most universities across the nation have a limited budget; nevertheless, they still have many responsibilities to build dormitories, classes, and academic facilities for new students. Athletics games enable colleges to overcome their financial crises in today's precarious economic time. For instance, my college pays significant attention to athletic activities and gets funds through corporates' sponsorship, broadcasting agreements, and ticket sale. Last semester, my college made an enormous profit from broadcasting the final game for our most popular soccer ball team. Consequently, the university used the profit money to construct a new chemistry laboratory and renovated the scientific library. If it were not for sports activities, my college would have never been able to build these facilities.
Secondly, they build relationships because we meet a lot of people who share common interests, and we can network, which can help us academically and even professionally. For instance, a few years ago, when I was in college, I participated in various on-campus social events, where all students and professors had fun by gathering and making acquaintances with each other. I developed friends from different fields on many social occasions like The Movie Day, End Of the year trip, and many other events. Whenever I needed help in any of my academic subjects, I could always find countless friends who were offering their assistance. Moreover, during my recent job interview, the boss was one of my colleagues who I met on one of those movie days, and I got the job. This experience taught me that extracurricular activities benefit students in a way that no books, classes, or libraries can replicate.
In conclusion, I believe that colleges should fund social and sports activities equally with academic facilities not only because those activities can generate money, but they are also valuable in building relationships.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.408 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13387229407 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610666666667 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5888908258 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.294117647 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.17647058824 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137422076338 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047577299189 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498568280942 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102097848442 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467678728716 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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