Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
University is a golden gate by which students should prepare themselves for their future jobs. Thus, it is obvious that the major purpose of universities is to train not only well educated engineers, doctors, and teachers, but also adroit ones. With this in mind, I’m of the opinion that universities should allocate an equal amount of budget to both sports, and social activities as much as they do to classes and libraries and, there should be a balance between them. I will delve in to some reasons to substantiate my point.
From one point of view, “a healthy brain lives in a healthy body” this is a fundamental issue during a student’s life on a campus. Thanks to this fact that during a semester students are bombarded with theoretical materials, it is essential to have social activities, and also do some sports beside their lessons in order to lead a salubrious life. Additionally, social activities help students to burgeon their social abilities, and ameliorate physical health. On the other hand, focusing simply on university lessons or not taking part in social activities can have a huge detrimental impact on the standards on student’s life. Nevertheless, the atmosphere of exercising and social activities can aid students to change their monotonous lives.
From another point of view, with the didactic purpose of university by doing social activities along with lessons, students learn how to do teamwork in a football team or while climbing a mountain. They will have the opportunity to learn how to communicate and improve their social relations during social activities like multicultural ceremonies well, and work as a team. Furthermore, students will make mistakes which are inevitable in such activities. By doing so, students can learn many priceless things and get invaluable experiences. Hence, they can use these experiences in their future lives, try to work through their mistakes. Moreover, time allocation for these activities helps students to have programs for their other daily activities. Moreover, an amiable space of competition will be created. In this ambience everyone will try to accomplish their tasks as a group member.
To sum up, I strongly believe that neither just classes and theoretical homework nor merely doing sports and social activities alone can lead to prosperity. If there is a balance between these two aspects, much more better results can be expected.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 751, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Two successive sentences begin with the same adverb. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...grams for their other daily activities. Moreover, an amiable space of competition will b...
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Line 4, column 211, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...balance between these two aspects, much more better results can be expected.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, well, while, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2040.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23076923077 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87819342125 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2796060164 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.368421053 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5263157895 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78947368421 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18179284141 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572697971201 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586455119953 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124678779427 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412783584767 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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