Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of giving equal amount of financial support to sports and social activities as like as classes and libraries. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely give the equal support to sports and social activities with regards to classes and libraries. It is my firm belief that sports and social activities are very essential parts of our life for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, one of the reasons for my specific opinion is that sports and social activities give us new experience and help to take big responsibility in future life. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. I remember when I was in junior high school and I wanted to join the football team. I was small and had never played much football before, but I wanted to try. My father didn’t think I’d like football very much, but he said that if I wanted to do it, I could. After three months of football practice and riding the bench I ended up hating football. All the kids picked on me because of my size and I wasn’t very good at tackling or catching. Even though I hated everything about the football team, I was and still am grateful for the experience. If my father hadn’t let me try, I would have blamed him for the way things turned out. It was important for me to make the decision myself so I could take responsibility for my own choices and learn not to blame others.
Secondly, why I illustrate my specific opinion is that sports and social activities teach us how to take new risk in the future job life and give us experience how to perform risk able task. Because completing risk able job is a huge challenge for our life. It makes us stronger for the future life. Drawing from my own experience, When I think of risk, I immediately think of the stand-up comedy class I tried a few years ago. I’ve always admired comedians, but I was never brave enough to take the stage and try myself. For my birthday, my wife paid for me to take a stand-up comedy class. I was so nervous. The first time I took the stage I could hardly say a word. I wanted to quit, but my wife told me I’d regret it. I went back and tried again. I still wasn’t funny, but I lasted a couple minutes longer. By the end of the three-month class, I gave a ten-minute stand-up routine to a packed comedy club in midtown Manhattan. Putting myself on a stage in front of an audience was terrifying, but it made me a stronger person. If I had never taken the risk, I would still regret it today.
In light of the above-mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that sports and social activities must be given equal support. This is because these give us a new experience and help us to take a big responsibility in future life and teach us how to take a new risk in the future job life.
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...and I wanted to join the football team. I was small and had never played much foo...
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...ask. Because completing risk able job is a huge challenge for our life. It makes ...
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...regret it. I went back and tried again. I still wasn’t funny, but I lasted a coup...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 87.0 43.0788530466 202% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2402.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 545.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40733944954 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56962372348 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45871559633 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 766.8 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8476878007 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8275862069 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7931034483 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.31034482759 5.45110844103 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13065292017 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0359077018387 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638789434205 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10631072309 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0796648533946 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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