Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Boys and girls should
attend separate schools. Use specific reasons and examples to support your
answer.
The discussion about whether or not the advantages and disadvantages of separate schools for boys and girls are a very controversial discussion. If I were forced to chose I raise my voice for that the separate schools for boys and girls have a lot of disadvantages. It is my firm belief that separate schools for boys and girls create a huge problems for them for a number of reasons. I will develop thes ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, one of the reasons for my specific thought is that in the separate school they cannot find full knowledge. Because they cannot cooperate the subject matters with each other. If they are in combined school beside their study they also can know outer knowledge from each other. I have to admit my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my personal experiences. I remembered ten years ago, when, I was read in combined school. From my school girl friends I learnt various esoteric subject matters which I never learnt from a boy friend. The girl friends gave me various socioeconomical information which they faced in the society in their everday life. I used those information in my future life. It was very helpful for me to complete my thesis work in later life. If my girls friends had not given such types of knowledge I would never performed better in my future thesis paper.
Secondly, combined school helps the students to find better knowledge about the general social conflict of our society. The boys can better understand the girl’s life and do better in future in combinedly. My personal example is a compelling illustration of this. I remember when I read in college I attend in a social movement for the equal right for the women. My girl friends convinced me by their thoughts. And consequently I response to their thought and was able to establish the equal right for women which would be very beneficial for our society and ultimately our country. If I had not read in combined college I would have never attend in the women movement and at last our country left behind in compare to other countries.
To sum up in light of above reasons I strongly believe that boys and girls should read in combined school. Because it helps them to understand, each other and they combinedly help the society and ultimately the country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ys and girls have a lot of disadvantages It is my firm belief that separate schoo...
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...rate the subject matters with each other If they are in combined school beside th...
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...he society in their everday life I used those information in my future life It was very helpful f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, second, secondly, so, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69230769231 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60212950437 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421836228288 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 403.0 20.1344086022 2002% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1891.0 100.406767564 1883% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 403.0 20.6045352989 1956% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 70.0 5.45110844103 1284% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173173435534 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173173435534 0.076458572812 226% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116784848813 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309245160038 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 202.2 11.7677419355 1718% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -329.11 58.1214874552 -566% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 159.3 10.1575268817 1568% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.4 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 25.86 8.01818996416 323% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 10.002688172 550% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 163.2 10.0537634409 1623% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 26.0 10.247311828 254% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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