The expression “ever, never give up" means to keep trying and never stop
working for your goals. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Use
Specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The discussion about whether or not the need for continuous trying in case of achieving a goal is a very controversial discussion. There are people on both sides of the policy who have very strong feelings. Some people feel that one should not waste time to a certain goal for a longer period. However, most are of believing that one should continuously try and never stop working until the goal is achieved. If I were forced to chose, I would raise my voice for that one should never give up’s trying to achieve one’s goal. It is my firm belief that continuous trying for a certain goal gives extraordinary results due to several reasons. I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, one of the reasons for my specific thought is that continuous hard work with proper rules and regulation helps a person to achieve his goals. Because continuous trying gives a person extra strength for achieving the goal. Hard work and continuous trying is the panacea to achieve a goal. I have to admit my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experienced. You see, I have always wanted to write a book. After graduating from college, I thought I would write an indispensible piece of literature that would live on forever. However after years of writing, I finally figured out that I was not very good at it. But I continued to read, write and study. I tried to write a screenplay and when that failed I tried to write a TV shows. After all these failures, for some reasons, I still had an urge to write. A few years ago I started teaching toefl and discovered that I had learn some valuable information that I could present in a new and unique way. After years of writing and failing I finally completed a book that I could be proud of. But more importantly , I learn more about my strengths, weaknesses and directions I wanted my life to take. If I had not continuously performed that types of hard work, I would have never learnt about the aim of my life and how to achieve that aim. For this reason we can say that continuous trying helps a person to achieve his goal.
Secondly, why I illustrate my specific thought is that by continuous trying one-person take deep knowledge about this subject. Because he can learn from the basic label of that subject. Again, in later time he can teach other people about the subject, and give proper guideline hoe to achieve this goal. My personal example is a compelling illustration of this. I remember when I prepared to be a well class comedian because I have always admired comedians, but I was never brave enough to take the stage and try myself. For my birthday, my wife paid for me to take a stand-up comedy class. I was so nervous. The first time I took the stage I could hardly say a word. I wanted to quit, but my wife told me I would regret it. I went back and tried again. I still was not funny, but I lasted a couple of minutes longer. By the end of the ten-month class, I gave a fifty-minute stand-up routine to a packed comedy club in midtown Manhattan. Putting myself on a stage in front of an audience was terrifying, but I can made it due to long term trying. From that time I conducted comedy class and still now I am very experienced in case of teaching comedy. If I had not trying for long time , Iwould have never be a good comedy teacher.
To sum up, from the above reasons, I strongly believe that a person should continuously try to achieve his goal. Because by longtime trying one can solve any type of complex task and those people would very expert in those subject.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, after all, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 96.0 43.0788530466 223% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2875.0 1977.66487455 145% => OK
No of words: 656.0 407.700716846 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.38262195122 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06087906887 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48478368607 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.407012195122 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 928.8 618.680645161 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 656.0 20.1344086022 3258% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2875.0 100.406767564 2863% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 656.0 20.6045352989 3184% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 104.0 5.45110844103 1908% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 5.5376344086 433% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194826451946 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.194826451946 0.076458572812 255% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130381706746 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411981688692 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 327.2 11.7677419355 2780% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -577.44 58.1214874552 -994% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 256.8 10.1575268817 2528% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 9.6 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 38.56 8.01818996416 481% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 53.0 10.002688172 530% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 264.4 10.0537634409 2630% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 53.0 10.247311828 517% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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