Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that world infrastructure is now entirely changed from agricultural unit to informational and technological sector. In this regard, universities and colleges are of paramount importance because they instill essential values in individuals. There are different schools of thought among scholars on whether to disburse funds for building libraries or to improve sports and social activities. If I were asked, I would agree with the notion that athletic and social activities should receive equal funding support. In whats follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first compelling reason corroborating my stance is associated with the notion the athletic activities are critical for enhancing students' learning capabilities. Since most of the sports activities take place outside in the open air, students will get a chance to breathe and exercise in the fresh air. Thus, oxygen will be supplemented to the brain cells and hence their mental capabilities are enhanced that is of utmost importance for their learning and memorizing the lessons. It is also worth mentioning that students studying in libraries are deprived of such facilities. By the way of illustration, before last year my college had no athletic stadium and authorities had no interest in funding the sports activity. My college had shown average results until last year. When our University chancellor was changed, and he emphasized building the athletic stadium for students. This had a dramatic impact on students' performance. Many students who participated in games expressed their happiness that they felt more active and smart in studies and overall activities. My example clearly manifests the importance of athletic activities.
The second rationale behind my opinion is rooted in the fact that social activities will strengthen their relationships with people that would be helpful for their future. To be more specific, Social activities like drama societies, athletic clubs, and festival societies are opportunities for students to meet with new people and build social interaction with them. Hence, their interaction with people outside the university will provide them good opportunities for their future careers. As a case in mind to shed some light, my cousin was an active member of the drama society in his sophomore years. He developed relations with many directors and producers while he was still in university. This is due to the reason his university drama society always held social events where they invite such prominent figures. Just after his graduation, he was offered a role in a TV commercial. It was the start of his bright future. He is A famous TV actor now. If his university had not arranged any social event, he would not have developed a connection with directors.
By perusing the above paragraphs, one can infer that proving equal financial support to athletic and social activities has innumerable advantages. For the sake of brevity, few points are worth reiterating, First, athletic activities are vital for students learning. Second, social activities are integral for their future progress.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, second, so, still, then, thus, while, by and large, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2694.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39879759519 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94313259466 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541082164329 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 847.8 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.062291734 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2142857143 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8214285714 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.07142857143 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208937683698 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553085342065 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565429073539 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138986883435 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460486507863 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.74 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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