Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Activity, the foundation of personal development, has been valued and even triggers heated discussion over whether sports and social activities are as important as classes and libraries, which should receive equal financial support. Only by supporting classes and libraries, in many people's views, can universities boost personal development. Contrary to these people's opinion is my perspective that sports and social activities can also be beneficial to people, due to the contributions to healths and necessary skills.
What must be prioritized is that sports and social activities, rather than classes and libraries, can strengthen people's health by improving physical health and mental health. To begin with, only by supporting activities can colleges promote students' physical health. In detail, if colleges encourage students to participate in a variety of sports by building more gyms, there will be more and more students playing basketball, playing soccer, and stuff like that; they will exercise every day, which can promote their physical health. On the contrary, under no circumstances can classes or libraries benefit students on the physical level. Moreover, never can we ignore the significance of activities to youngsters' mental health. To explain it further, when I was stressed out in the library, I always went out to run about 5km, which can make me relax, and I would focus better on the schoolwork after exercising. In contrast, the more time cost in the libraries or classes, the more students can not concentrate on things.
What is equally worth discussing is that by ensuring equal financial support to sports and social activities, instead of supporting classes and libraries, universities will be favorable to students' necessary skills by promoting interpersonal skills and teamwork skills. Initially, the more students attend activities, the more they foster interpersonal skills. To be more specific, by playing soccer, not only can we learn how to come up with different strategies to win the game, but also we will study how to communicate with each other better and care about other people, which is an important skill after graduating. However, it is impossible for students to improve interpersonal skills by studying in libraries or classes. Furthermore, sports and social activities can place students as beneficiaries by boosting teamwork skills. Specifically, when playing basketball, students have to work together to practice making long or short passes to each other, which can help them gain a better understanding of teamwork. On the other hand, will studying in the classes or libraries benefit students' teamwork skills?
Health, the foundation of students' life, can be boosted when they attend diverse activities. Necessary skills, the bedrock of students' future success, will be facilitated, if they participate in more activities. In conclusion, only by guaranteeing equal financial support to sports and social activities, as well as classes and libraries, can students reap numerous benefits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 362, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...personal development. Contrary to these peoples opinion is my perspective that sports a...
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Line 6, column 1047, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'study'
Suggestion: study
...ng of teamwork. On the other hand, will studying in the classes or libraries benefit stu...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, in conclusion, in contrast, as well as, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2587.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53961456103 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99489452725 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466809421842 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 768.6 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4211502618 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.35 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.35 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181640481431 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717676146412 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744557166013 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137997469251 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597065391364 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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