Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Personal enjoyment, the way of costing spare time, has been valued and even triggers a heated discussion over whether people should spend so much time on personal enjoyment today. Personal enjoyment, in many peoples' views, can help the public relax. Contrary to these people's opinions is my perspective that doing things people should do is superior, due to the contributions to personal academic performance and sterling qualities.

What must be prioritized is that doing necessary things, instead of enjoying, is beneficial to people's academic learning, by boosting their efficiency and improving knowledge. To begin with, only by spending more time studying, can students gain a large amount of expertise. In detail, the more I spend time reading books, writing papers, and preparing for exams, the better I get great grades, which can place me as a beneficiary when I apply graduate degree; on the other hand, under no circumstances can youngsters acquire better grades by playing games or watching TiktTk. Moreover, never can we ignore the significance of doing necessary things to improve people's efficiency. To explain it further, when I was focusing on the schoolwork, I could go to the library to read some books, get online to collect some data, or if I have some problems, I could ask the professors to help, so that I could finish my homework all on time; in contrast, if I wait until the deadline because of spending so much time playing, I could not finish my homework on time, which would hurt my grades.

What is equally worth discussing is that doing vital things, rather than entertaining, is favorable to people's personal sterling qualities, by fostering their independence and persistence. First, it is well-known that by doing crucial things, people can promote their independence. To be specific, when other classmates were going out to play games, I was solving a tough schoolwork problem, so nobody could help me to resolve this problem except myself, and I solved this problem independently; on the other hand, if I also went out to enjoy myself, I could not solve problems by myself, which could not improve my independence. Furthermore, never can we ignore the importance of doing crucial things for people's persistence. Specifically, once I signed up for a singing competition, I practiced very hard every day, I did not cost my spare time on personal enjoyment, and I finally got the first prize, so in the process, I learned more about persistence; on the contrary, there would be no chance for me to reap the importance of persistence if I spent time on enjoyment.

Academic learning, the foundation of students' future, can be boosted if they spend more time doing necessary things. Sterling qualities, the bedrock of people's success, can be facilitated if they cost more time on vital things. In conclusion, only by spending time on crucial things can people reap numerous benefits.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, well, in conclusion, in contrast, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2443.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.079002079 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90121294965 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496881496881 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 744.3 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.96373607 48.9658058833 239% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 162.866666667 100.406767564 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0666666667 20.6045352989 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263662646763 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115570056749 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749986564717 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193788227546 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621275502343 0.0645574589148 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 11.7677419355 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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