It is important to keep students socially engaged, and sports and activities are some of the methods used to fulfill this duty. Some people concur that these things are as significant as classes and libraries. However, I disagree with this notion and argue that keeping the quality of education high should be our first priority for two reasons, which I will develop in subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, we should clearly define the major aim of the universities and colleges. In my opinion, the most important mission is to give better education and prepare excellent people who can change the world. In order to be an expert in their field, they should possess soft skills along with hard skills. In contrast, a hundred years ago, there was almost no need to have soft skills. It was sufficient to be able to perform the technical aspects of the job.But, in today's modern world, having only hard skills is not sufficient. For this reason, universities try to push their students toward socializing. However, that does not mean they should devote most of their budget to building large sports areas or organizing high-cost events. For example, imagine a college that has a limited number of books in its library and obsolete machines in its laboratory but a perfect football arena and also sends its students on trips every week in order to socialize them. As a result, when these students graduate, they may have excellent communication and other soft skills, but they will lack the necessary abilities to complete the work.For this reason, the prime concern of universities and colleges should be delivering high-quality education.
Second of all, no one can deny that teachers play a big role in education. Thus, universities must pay attention to attracting well-educated experts for teaching subjects rather than arranging super-quality parties. Consider a university that holds basketball tournaments every month and pays out a lot of money to the winners.On the other side, it has experienced instructors who have low motivation for teaching because of their small wages. Instead of increasing their wages, the university continues to distribute its budget to students with the aim of increasing their motivation toward the game. Consequently, students may have great soft skills when they finish their education. However, with their little proficiency and limited knowledge about their field, It is easy to see why universities should prioritize education quality over sports or extracurricular activities.
To make a long story short, for the two reasons outlined above, I am of the opinion that classes and libraries should get the highest financial support.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, so, thus, well, for example, in contrast, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2252.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22505800464 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82359821244 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559164733179 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 689.4 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3945860178 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.526315789 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6842105263 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36842105263 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166947779052 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507153465736 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461577061053 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119347391275 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042491367096 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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