It is important to keep students socially engaged and sports and activities are some of the methods used in order to fulfill this duty. Some people concur that these things are as significiant as classes and libraries. However, I disagree with this notion and argue that keeping quality of education high should be our first priority for two reasons and I will develop these ideas in subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, we should define clearly the major aim of the universities and colleges. In my opinion, the most important mission is to give better education and prepare excellent people that can change the world. In order to be an expert of their field, they should possess soft skills along with hard skills. In contrast, one hundred years ago there was almost no need to have soft skills. Having ability for doing technical part of the job was enough. But, in today's modern world having only hard skills is not sufficient. For this reason, universities try to push their students toward socializing. However, that does not mean they should devote most of their budget to build large sport areas or organize high-cost events. For example, imagine a college that has limited number of books in library and obsolete machines in laboratory but perfect football arena and also sends its students to trips every week in order to socialize them. As a result, when these students graduate, they will maybe have superb communication and other soft skills, but do not have right abilities for getting the work done. For this reason, prime concern of universities and colleges should be delivering high quality education.
Second of all, no one can deny that teachers play a big role on education. Thus, universities must pay attention to attract well educated experts for teaching subjects rather than arranging super quality parties. For example, assume a university that organize basketball matches every month and awarding winners with really big amount of money. On the other side, it has experienced instructors that have low motivation for teaching because of small amount of wage. Instead of increasing their wage, university continues to distribute its budget to students with the aim of increasing their motivation toward the game. Consequently, again students maybe have great soft skills when they finish education. However, with the little proficiency and limited knowledge about their field. It is certainly clear to see why universities should pay much attention to the education's quality rather than sports or activities.
To make a long story short, for the two reasons outlined above, I am of the opinion that classes and libraries should get the highest financial support.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ess soft skills along with hard skills. In contrast, one hundred years ago there w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, thus, well, for example, in contrast, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2261.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15034168565 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60337857889 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555808656036 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4134211834 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3043478261 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0869565217 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4347826087 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180015017339 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0496310168006 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450959794165 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126775607351 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398162776544 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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