Do you agree or disagree with the following statement When people succeed it is entirely because of hard work Luck has nothing to do with their success Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position

Nowadays, the world is intricate, developed, and competitive, so there is nothing haphazardly, and I agree entirely with this statement that everything relies on working hard. There are different reasons why I feel like this, which I will expose in the following essay.

First of all, hardworking is a safe and reliable thing that everyone can rely on; however, chance happens once or twice a time, so diligent people try to trust their abilities not to chance. My personal experience is one of the compelling of this, my brother was giving his exams by cheating, and he said I am very lucky while in the final exams security unit found her cheated and he missed that exams, so I am guessing that working more is far more accessible and convenient than reliance on lucky.

Secondly, successful people repeat more and more that accomplishments earned by hard and novel work, so we should be more learn from them, for the sake of they passed the success way before us, and as the saying goes, we should lessen other's experiences instead of searching new. For example, steve jobs start his work at 4 am, or Michael Jordan wakes up early morning while other people are still in bed. So there are different examples of successful persons who gained prosper through hardworking.

The last but not least reason is that contrary to popular belief, success is usually earned by spending time, and success is a process, not an exact event, so hardworking improves other good attributes like patience and raising spirit. In the light of this fact, in my opinion, a really successful person is one who has this sight about success, not the person who thinks that a chance occurrence yields success. Drawing from my own experience, I learned that success is not straightway and access to it needs hardworking for a long time. For instance, I passed the university entrance exam after two years with an excellent grade, and this showed me that concentration and consistently working are two main keys to success.

In conclusion, luck happens only once or twice, and it is not a repetitive occurrence; also, there are several examples of successful persons that show us that success relies on hardworking, as well as success is a long-term process that improves different aspects of humanity as a result of that for receive success we should put hardworking in the first priority.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ising spirit. In the light of this fact, in my opinion, a really successful perso...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1975.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90074441687 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71390974608 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573200992556 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.6579296458 48.9658058833 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.583333333 100.406767564 164% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5833333333 20.6045352989 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.25 5.45110844103 280% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167027870194 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664459708598 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493897661807 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101927620316 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543663435163 0.0645574589148 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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