Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? “When people succeed, it is entirely because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with their success.” Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.
Luck is not so important as hard work is. Hard work is a panacea for all human problems. Due to its paramount importance, efforts for elevating its effectiveness has always been among sociologists` top priorities. In this regard, many people support this opinion that success is the result of hard work rather than luck. Similarly to common belief, I believe that hard work as a critical factor consists of various elements that lead a person to the success path. I will delve into two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
The first reason that makes me hold the belief that some certain items exist innate the hard-working that direct a person to success is consistency. Undoubtedly, contrary to somebodies` belief, luck does not have a remarkable effect on individuals` life. It is common knowledge that humans are inborn with a natural instinct to be successful, and consistency brings them the right condition. What would happen if there were no continuity in one`s life? Obviously, a person should endure an unfortunate circumstance because in her way to the purpose she never knows where she stands. This confusion is not only disappointing but also is misleading. When people try to achieve their goals, continuously following their pass is essential, therefore. Take my personal experience as an example, a couple of years ago when I was eighteen, I tried to be accepted in the university, it was an enormous aim to me. I had not been accepted in university at that time since I was young, and I did not know how much consistency is critical. I had read sparsely in a day and never focused on my process. Apparently, if I tried to stick in a continuance way of study, I would never miss my right way.
Another equally noteworthy reason to bear in mind is an incentive as a persevere work`s component. Indeed, without an impulse that encourages a person, one never can attain the desire she has. The more one has the motivation, the more possibility of becoming successful exist. Although many critics may challenge this opinion and believe that hard-working is emanated from the level of ambitious a person has, psychologists` evidence show another viewpoint, and support this notion that something intestine should inspire a person. Scientifically speaking, successful people are those who have enough innate stimulation to follow their dreams. To illustrate, these days, the public does not look at stimulation as a helping factor; rather, they consider it a necessary element of success. Despite the fact that imagine desires play a prominent role in a person`s life for depicting a road to pursue, without impetus, they would remain as desires. One of the friends of mine, for instance, as a successful person, always had talked about feelings she had when she focused on achieving a purpose. She described how much these feelings make her excited and help her to track the path. Thus, everything about being successful rather than luck firstly refers to their own selves.
To summarize, contemplating all remarks, we can safely conclude that hard-working both items consistency and incentive are determining factors for successful, and luck does not have anything to do with success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, similarly, so, therefore, thus, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2734.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 531.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14877589454 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09597417452 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 212.727598566 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 858.6 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1356055029 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6428571429 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9642857143 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22469763403 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0570983942953 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047599341618 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14784758869 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.01516328291 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 86.8835125448 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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