Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Work, as we all know, is the most crucial part of life. Although it may seem exaggerated, at first sight, noticing the world is ruled now, one may find this contention sensible. In this regard, some people are inclined toward this opinion that if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it rather than waiting for a more satisfactory job. I am of the opinion that choosing a secure job is the epitome of wisdom. I will delve into two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
The first reason which makes me hold the belief that a wise person chooses a secure job is that opportunities get lost as immediately as they appeared. As always told “Caution is a condition of reason”., if a person declines a secure job, is there any possibility to find a satisfying one? Regarding world developments, the demands and supplies for jobs are remarkably changed which leads people to get in trouble to find a job. Whereas many critics debate that the majority of people are at work these days, it is undeniable that lots of people since refuse a secure job wishing to find a satisfactory one are soaked in debts and unfortunately are disappointed. Who knows what tomorrow holds? Thus, wisdom requires a person who has the opportunity of a secure job, to take it. And if there was any chance in future promote her career to a better and more satisfactory job.
Another equally noteworthy reason to bear in mind is that there are many people who prefer to have granted the future. In other words, instead of being in careers which require employees to be creative or provide excellent circumstances for employees to be more engaged they want to spend specific time in a specific job for a specific income, indeed they are members of the society which never want to endure any risks or excitement in their job. They are only vulnerable to the security of their job and nothing else can arise. Based on an experiment which had conducted among two different companies’ employees, which I had recently read an article about, results show that security in a job becomes the first factor of choosing a job amongst sample members. They concluded that despite the past, the expectation of a job transformed to sinecure secure job rather than more satisfying ones.
To summarize, all aforementioned remarks, we safely conclude that wisdom requires a person to choose an opportunity of having a secure job because finding a satisfactory one is too risky and not granted. In terms of job circumstances, people try to find sinecure secure jobs, in spite of before.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, regarding, so, thus, whereas, in other words, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2164.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84116331096 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85639315005 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510067114094 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.4409397419 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.894736842 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5263157895 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84210526316 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366846827371 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120156094407 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103705400814 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237530075922 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488453094714 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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