satisfactory jobs or secure jobs?
Job, as we all know, for the majority of people, is the most important part of their life. Due to the paramount importance of the job, efforts for elevating its effectiveness have always been among the top priority of scholars. In this regard, on the one hand, many people support this opinion that if an individual find a secure job should grasp it. On the other hand, many have a different ideas. Similarly, I believe that a secure job will have numerous positive effects on a person`s life. I will delve into two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
The first reason that makes me hold the belief that a secure job is favorable is related to self-confidence. Undoubtedly, one of the most important criteria that define one`s position in society is the job. If there were no jobs, this position would be lost. Apparently, unless a person has a secure job that gives him enough money, he can introduce himself as a member of society that belongs to a certain stratification of community. No money means no class and thus no self-confidence. Evidently, both earning money and belonging feelings are fundamental for self- confidence. Scientifically speaking, in many countries- especially developing ones- as a result of the high rate of unemployment and low secure job opportunities, residents do not show such feelings. Literary, it means the lower job exists in a community, the lower self-confidence among citizens is seen.
Another equally noteworthy reason to bear in mind is satisfaction. Without a doubt, the salary a person earns conveys the feeling of productivity to him. Needless to say, one of the elements of life satisfaction is productivity, that having a job can provide it. Even a low paid job is better than unemployment. Although many critics may challenge this idea and debate that having a dream job will improve people`s creativity, an increasing number of people who want to have any kind of job show another aspect. Take my personal experience as an example. In other words, people are seeking the satisfaction of themselves through the job. A couple of years ago, I was searching for my dream job, and I endured long-lasting unemployment and depression as well, unfortunately. After a while, I had to work because of the monetary problems I had at that time. Although it was not a dream job, it provided me enough money and a secure work environment. Surprisingly, I have continued that job up to now because it transmits the feeling of contentment. What would have happened if I had persisted in my dream job? I would drown into depression and my life became undesirable.
To summarize, contemplating all remarks, we can safely conclude that generally speaking, in many circumstances, a secure job is far better than a satisfactory one. Since it not only provides self-confidence but also makes a person feel satisfied.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, if, may, similarly, so, thus, well, while, kind of, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2417.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03541666667 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20185425335 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529166666667 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 775.8 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.066732558 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.3448275862 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5517241379 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41379310345 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439790351249 0.236089414692 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114297587776 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0957642917774 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271059141689 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349364793583 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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