Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does.
Happiness, as we all know, is our wealth. Although it may seem exaggerated, at first sight, one may find this contention sensible. In this regard, some people are inclined toward this opinion that the job has more effect on happiness than social life does. Unlike the common belief, I am of the opinion that this is a social life that plays a dominant role in happiness rather than a job. I will delve into two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
The first reason which makes me hold this belief is the apathy of the job. All around the world, many people have jobs that are not in the area of their interest and require them to be in unwanted circumstances. I other words, one may choose a work just because of its benefits such as job security, circumstances or career future. All of these reasons are the requirements but are not enough. In fact, not only do they not feel happy but also feel apathy and abhorrence in somehow. In an examination which has conducted about the job, and I have read an article about recently, results showed that people who choose a job based on its beneficial circumstances instead of interest, noticeably show lower efficiency.
Another equally noteworthy reason to bear in mind is the big advantage of social life which means network. Nowadays, life without network seems empty, so the winners are better networkers. Besides, social life has charming and wonderful circumstances which one can do freely whatever makes her happy. Indeed, everything depends on one`s desire. So, in addition to the network, the lack of responsibilities is another advantageous side of social life which makes it a desirable candidate for bringing happiness. Although there are many debates among critics which suggest that it is a work which builds one`s networks properly, but it is undeniable that regarding modern living conditions, the share of social life is far bigger than other factors.
To summarize, all contemplating remarks, we safely concluded that indifference about a job makes it an unwanted circumstance, so the efficiency of people at these jobs is lower than others. Moreover, the ability of building networks which is the necessity of modern life is not possible unless by effective social life.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, in addition, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1897.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03183023873 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82744437066 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554376657825 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0261584734 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8421052632 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8421052632 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73684210526 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176925398412 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560602049081 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599838246601 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116701602392 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384202853997 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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