Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? When people succeed, it is entirely because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with their success. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.
No one can deny the fact that without any effort and determination, no one in life can achieve success however there are times where god favor us as well. In the given scenario, it is perceived that there is no such thing as luck, a person attain success only with his hard work and nothing else. Meanwhile, I am of the opinion that undoubtedly, being focused on our goal backed by our effort lead towards success nevertheless we tend to rely on our luck sometimes. I feel this way for several reasons which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
To commence with, persistence is the foremost thing one need to acquire in order to reach goal. In addition, without these attributes, luck could do merely nothing. To be more precise, if a person stay calm and relaxed without conferring any effort with the misconception that god will do miracle on him then he is such a huge failure in life. Drawing from my own experience, my brother he is a great devote of god and he always praises god for making his wishes fulfill rather than giving effort to achieve whatever he wants. Indeed, without any input we will get zero output and it is 100 percent true that luck does not favor if you do not do hard work. Therefore, we should never restrict us from continually trying to achieve our success instead of relying on our luck.
Next, luck do favor us yet, it require a lot of effort as well. To be more precise, if a person is employing her full effort nonetheless he is not achieving his goal then in such case luck is something we crave for. My little sister is a compelling evidence of it, last year there was a quiz competition at her school and there numerous group participating there. Unquestionably, the best one would win having said that, there is doubt that they all had prepared well. However, god show his love to my sister and she consequently won the competition. Furthermore, she did not get succeed not just because of luck but along with her determination and effort, luck favors her. Hence, it is rubbish to be fully dependent on luck only.
All things considered, although it is imperative for us to depend on our luck somedays, it is not sufficient. Hard work is something that paves our path towards our goal. Hence, if we could carry these two things with us then nothing can obstruct our way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, hence, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, then, therefore, well, while, i feel, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55980861244 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61199323165 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538277511962 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3335416661 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178177451507 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593887987676 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556927783184 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112898657311 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028373685236 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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