Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? When people take time to relax, they should enjoy hobbies or physical activities that are very different from what they do at work.
Nowadays, people are very busy with their work so they are really stressed out and tired after working for a long time. It is necessary for them to take a break after work. As far as I am concerned, I think people should enjoy hobbies or physical activities that are the same as their work to relax.
First, enjoying the same hobbies and physical activities as their jobs is helpful for their work. While people are relaxing, they maybe come up with some new ideas and solutions to the problems that they meet. In this way, they are more good at their jobs than before. Clearly, they are more likely to get promoted and higher salaries, which will definitely make them happy. For instance, I was an English teacher in a school, and I was willing to listening to English music to get relaxed. Therefore, I used these songs to teach my students to learn English grammar, which were so interesting for them. Then I became popular among students, which helped me get higher income than before. Accordingly, same hobbies or physical activities as what people do at work to take a break can help them a lot.
Second, strengthening relationship between coworkers is another reason why people like to enjoy the similar hobbies and physical activities as their work. For one thing, since people are able to become more familiar with their work in this way, they will have more topics to talk about with their colleagues. For another, people can join a few physical activities together to have fun and release their pressure. Take my father for example, he is a PE teacher in a college. After work, he usually plays sports such as basketball and soccer with other teachers to ease. During the whole process, they need to communicate with each other a lot, which will definitely strengthen their friendship. Hence, choosing the similar hobbies or physical activities as people’s jobs for relaxing is a wiser option.
As the two reasons mentioned above, it is easy to reach the conclusion that people can benefit more from enjoying hobbies or physical activities that are similar as what they work than the different hobbies or physical activities from their work. In this case, they are capable of living a better life in the future.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, hence, if, may, really, second, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, such as, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1858.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82597402597 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50725377071 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493506493506 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3955009633 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364865475713 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116970465149 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931605711611 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261204422051 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470611560272 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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