Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Woman should get same payment if taking the same task as man. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Gender equality is one of the essential goal mentioned in sustainable development goal of 2020. The reason why this subject included in World sustainable development goal is it is becoming concerning issue of in today’s society. In most workplace, gender inequality is occurring somehow. I am one of the victim of this issue. Henceforth, in answering this question, I would definitely agree that woman should get paid as same as man if they having same tasks. I have two reason why I agree with the statement.
First of all, In university, both male and female students receives same, equal academic knowledge and by the time when they graduate, all student get the understanding about same subjects with same knowledge. However, in work field, they valuate differently even knowledge and experience level are same. But I think women should evaluate as same as man because there is no difference or no advantages in both sexes. For example, after I graduated my university considerably higher GPA, I applied plenty of job. Then one of them invited me for interview; during the interview, employer told me that my initial payment will be low because of my capability of working in harsh condition. This is true gender inequality. Hence, I would strongly agree that we should receive equal payment without consideration of sexes.
Secondly, in both field work and office work, work tasks are same in both gender. But there might be some work requires physical ability, even thought there are plenty of women have stronger physical ability than man. Hence, work task should not discriminated by gender. For instance, my niece worked a company for ten years and did not promoted even she accomplished her task better than others. The reason why she is not promoted is her boss personally preferred man in upper manager position. However, she did same task as man.
In conclusion, nowadays, we should eliminate the perception that man is better than woman because they studied same subjects and they have same capability to accomplish task. Therefore, whenever I asked by such question, I would definitely agree with the statement that women and man should be equal at workplace.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 498, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun job seems to be countable; consider using: 'plenty of jobs'.
Suggestion: plenty of jobs
...sity considerably higher GPA, I applied plenty of job. Then one of them invited me for interv...
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Line 5, column 247, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'discriminate'
Suggestion: discriminate
...y than man. Hence, work task should not discriminated by gender. For instance, my niece worke...
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Line 5, column 338, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'promote'
Suggestion: promote
...ked a company for ten years and did not promoted even she accomplished her task better t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08055555556 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78796880573 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.1221989496 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0952380952 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1428571429 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38095238095 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278499452027 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848499078282 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830247224097 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18332029787 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423959468524 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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