Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people enjoy life more than old people do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Everyone have their own preferences of enjoyment activities, whether be a young pupil or be an old person. Nevertheless, I believe that young people definitely enjoy life more than the older ones. My preference will be exemplified in forthcoming paragraphs emphasizing mainly on two fundamental reasons.
First of all, young people are physically and mentally sound, which older people often struggle to be. Young individuals thus involve themselves with a lot of physical activities like sports and adventures. Young people are often inclined towards popular games like football and cricket along with a deep whim of enjoying adventures in nature like paragliding and boating. However, old individuals are generally sedentary and they are devoid of such enjoyments. I have my own experience to illustrate this. Last summer, we decided to go on a family trip to Pokhara. I always wanted to experience boating from my childhood but I never had the chance. So, this time I was quite excited and overwhelmed. However, my parents denied experiencing boating inasmuch as they thought that it was way too risky. Consequently, I had to boat with other tourists rather than my family. Though I enjoyed the entire process, I thought my parents missed one of the serene feelings of enjoying the aesthetics of nature in the form of boating.
Secondly, rock music has made young individual's life way interesting and exciting, which people from older generation often avoids. More and more young people are now inclined towards listening and enjoying heavy rock metal songs from popular music bands like Metallica and Iron Maiden. Not only they listen to those songs, they enjoy their live performances by attending their concerts or any other artist's tribute concerts to those artists. As I said above, while visiting Pokhara, I had a similar opportunity to attend a tribute concert of Metallica in one of the restaurant. I was so excited to get my tickets as I had always liked and played rock music during my school days. However, my excitement soon turned down when I knew my parents were not attending them. On top of that, they totally hated the idea and they just wanted to relax in hotel. This time as well, I went to the place alone and had a lot of fun with the beats and sounds that I always loved.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that young individuals enjoy their life way more than old people. This is mainly because young people are often physically fit to get involved in sports and adventures plus they have the notion of enjoying rock music.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'artists'' or 'artist's'?
Suggestion: artists'; artist's
...y attending their concerts or any other artists tribute concerts to those artists. As I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, first of all, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2132.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9696969697 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70943301654 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522144522145 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2732531472 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8333333333 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.875 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70833333333 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188291595133 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581423965257 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707049563044 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146240149853 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394217404263 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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