Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Young people play an essential role in our society. They are the backbone for our future because whetever they lean today, will implement in the future. Although some people would harbor the view that youngsters have no say about the future, I am of the conviction that youth nowadays, hold sway to change the future of our society. I had a strong belief that young people have firm influence on critical decisions for several reasons, and would develop my ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, students studying in colleges today are involved in active politics significantly, which means that they are able to raise their voices in our society. They hold the ralies and conduct plays to demonstrate vital issues such as corruption, crime against woman, a partiality against minorties that are not in the favour of our society,. I must say that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by my own experience. For example, I went to the Jwahar Lal University situated in Delhi, India to pursue a Master in Politcal science. While studying in the college, I joined a politcial party name Yuva march who in knowned for raising the voice against corrupt polticians. I firmly supported this party and their agendas; consequently, last year a new law called Lokpal was passed in our constitution whose purpose was to take strong action against the poltician who are caught accepting bribe. As we can see from this example, nowadays, students have strong influence on the critical decisions.
Secondly, intenstive involvement in private and government comapanies making it possible for young people to provide fresh ideas, which influence vital decisions for our society. In the past, the organizations were dependent on relatively older people in the range of 40-50 years for high positions such as General Manager, CFO, CEO, etc. Whereas, today, young people who have attended the Ivy leage universites also received a chance to work for reputed position in companies. Drawing from my brother's experience, he is 35 years old and working as a Head of Programming team for a German multinational company situated in Mumbai, India. Furthermore, he is contributing as a president of IT union, who is responsible to provide suggestions to the government for designing business guidelines for IT industry. For thie reason, had youngsters not been involved in a decision making process, it would have not been possible for the government to consider fresh ideas.
In view of the reasons mentioned, I would state that youth today hold sway on essential decisions impacting the future of our society. This is because students are not only involved in active politics but also intensively contributing to international companies in terms of fresh ideas.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, as to, for example, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2321.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14634146341 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84310125794 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527716186253 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7622199479 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.157894737 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7368421053 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137324591728 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473886587213 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427197283308 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0929962725034 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407955545741 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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