Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Young people play an essential role in our society. They are the backbone for our future because whatever they lean today, will implement in the future. Although some people would harbor the view that youngsters have no say about the future, I am of the conviction that youth nowadays hold sway to change the future of our society. I had a strong belief that young people have a strong influence on critical decisions for several reasons and would develop my ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.

To begin with, students studying in colleges today are involved in active politics significantly, which means that they can raise their voices in our society. They hold the rallies and conduct plays to demonstrate vital issues such as corruption, crime against women, a partiality against minorities that are not in favor of our society. I must say that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by my own experience. For example, I went to the Jawahar Lal University situated in Delhi, India, to pursue a Master's in Political Science. While studying in the college, I joined a political party name Yuva march, who is known for raising the voice against corrupt politicians. I firmly supported this party and their agendas; consequently, last year, a new law called Lokpal was passed in our constitution whose purpose was to take a decisive action against the politicians who are caught accepting bribes. As we can see from this example, nowadays, students have a strong influence on the critical decisions.

Secondly, intensive involvement in private and government companies, making it possible for young people to provide fresh ideas. In the past, the organizations were dependent on relatively older people in the range of 40-50 years for high positions such as General Manager, CFO, CEO, etc. Whereas, today, young people who have attended the Ivy League universities also received a chance to work for the reputed position in companies. Drawing from my brother's experience, he is 35 years old and working as a Head of Programming team for a German multinational company situated in Mumbai, India. Furthermore, he is serving as president of the IT union, who is responsible for providing suggestions to the government to design business guidelines for the IT industry. For this reason, had youngsters not been involved in a decision-making process; it would not have been possible for the government to consider fresh ideas.

Given the reasons mentioned, I would state that today's youth hold sway on essential decisions impacting the future of our society. This influence is because students are not only involved in active politics but also intensively contributing to international companies in terms of fresh ideas

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, as to, for example, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2293.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16441441441 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89244876202 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533783783784 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5354461427 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.684210526 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3684210526 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144917523101 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490177309491 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423884996539 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100082852133 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0438806692993 0.0645574589148 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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