Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today are less dependent on their parents than in the past.
In almost all of species, Parents take care of their children untill they reach a specific point in which they can take care of themselves. Above all of them, human kind is at the top in caring for their children. There is no more important thing than children in the world for parents. Though this caution must be ended in some point for the very children's merit. The duration and intensity of this dependancy differ from culture to culture and nation to nation. However, this dependancy has also changed through time. Some people might contend that children are getting more dependent. Nonetheless, I do not agree with this idea and I personally believe that children nowadays are way more independence than the children in the past. I will elaborate on my most outstanding reasons in what follows.
To start with, it is crucial to consider the occupations that children took in the past. In contrast with new world, children in the past usually continoued the job of their parents. For instance, a farmer’s son in the past would probably his father’s job as his career. Conversely, in the new world there are lots of job opportunities for each child. Moreover, in some well-developed countries, there are some organizations that are designed to explore kids talents in schools and suggest them which major or occupation to follow. Therefore a new world’s son is not dependant on his father’s occupation and has various of choices to consider for his career.
In addition to occupational aspects, there are some emotional aspects too. In contrast to new world’s relations in which the parents and children’s world are totally different, in the past, the relationship in the families were way more stronger. In the past, a specific kid probably took care of his parents in their elderlies but nowadays, children are giving this task to some organizations to take care of. Therefore the children in new era can move out from their parents house much sooner in contrast with the old world’s children.
To cut the story short, as mentiond in the above paragraphs, the emotional and occupational aspects of new world has changed in a way that contributes to more independancy of children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, however, if, moreover, nonetheless, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, in contrast, in contrast to, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1863.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0487804878 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95033719058 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479674796748 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2143044477 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.15 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.45 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147601565671 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0497349965451 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454926836162 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0833999044895 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0501703863595 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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