Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today modern era, in all of the societies, making progress and achieving great breakthroughs are of sunstantial importance, and they are looking for success and making their countries a better place to live for their people. For the sake of this goal, important decisions made in countries have a great influence on the future of community, and different individuals have remarkable efect on these decisions. In this line of thought, some people believe that today young people have significant influences on these kinds of important decisions, while many others dismiss the effect of youngsters in making these decisions. I, personally, concur with the latter group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First of all, today young people are not qualified enough to make important decision for society or effect on them. Nowadays, in today sophisticated world, societies are coutious and sensitive about important decision that have significant effect of the future of counties. Typically, today govenments and general public do not trust youngsters to make important decision for their communities since they do not have adequate experience and knowledge compared to elders. For instance, in my country, Iran, there is very little if any young individuals working as state's affair. All of the decisions affecting the current situation and the future of the society are made by old ones. In this situation, young people by no means have significant influence on the future of their communities.
Secondly, nowadays youngsters are involved in matters that have no remarkable effect on desicions made by states. Indeed, because of recent advancements in differents areas, youngsters' attitude have been changed, so that they dedicate themselves to matters that have not much effect on states' decisions. For example, today youngsters pay more careful attention to education, and since it has been more difficult to get a high academic degree compared to the past, they devote much more time to studying. Therefore, they focus on their education and do not have sufficient time so as to invest in pollitice or matter affecting states' decision or important desicions that are instrumental in the future of country.
To conclude, today youngsters have no effect on the important decisions that have remarkable influence on the future of community. Not only do young people have no sefficient competence and qualification for making decision, but also they are struggle to matters that have no effect on the future of country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 25, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
In today modern era, in all of the societies, making progress and achievin...
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Line 2, column 307, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...unties. Typically, today govenments and general public do not trust youngsters to make importa...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 579, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
...g individuals working as states affair. All of the decisions affecting the current situati...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 578, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ucation and do not have sufficient time so as to invest in pollitice or matter affecting...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2164.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31695331695 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87724534406 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461916461916 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.1356418029 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.25 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4375 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283102379488 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120275798559 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745380379363 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208676296631 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824773147476 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 25, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
In today modern era, in all of the societies, making progress and achievin...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 307, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...unties. Typically, today govenments and general public do not trust youngsters to make importa...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 579, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
...g individuals working as states affair. All of the decisions affecting the current situati...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 578, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ucation and do not have sufficient time so as to invest in pollitice or matter affecting...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2164.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31695331695 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87724534406 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461916461916 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.1356418029 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.25 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4375 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283102379488 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120275798559 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745380379363 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208676296631 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824773147476 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.