Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I agree with the idea that when making important decisions in a society, young people have no influence. There are three reasons to support my point of view, which will be explored in the following paragraphs.
First, the population of young people is so much fewer than that of old generations in a lot of developed countries. The gap of the population size is so great that we, young people, cannot have much power in a society. In Japan, my country, for example, we usually have an election once in a four years. However, the politicians who get elected are always the ones who have manifests that focus on elderly. This is because three fourths of eligible population is elderly who are over 60 years old. Even though all of the individual eligible young people votes, it is very challenging to have the result that young people expects. As a result, even in a democratic country, the population size of older people prevents us to have power in society.
Second, older people do not let young people replace them. It might be true that there should be well experienced old people in a company or society, but today, there are too many of them who do not let young people come in to their decision making. For instance, in a company that my father work, the administration are occupied by elders who are over 75 years old and there are long wait-list of people who wait for the heads of the company to pass away so that they can get the position. Because of this tradition, the company can never have young people to be in the important decisions in a company.
Thirdly, the young people's voices on social media do not affect the decisions at all. Some might say that we, young people, today, have social media to speak up. Of course, this makes movements within the young generation. However, most times, the society as a whole, does not listen to them. Even if we have the place to get together and make movement, the people who make big decisions are not affected by our voices on social media.
In conclusion, I profoundly believe that youngsters have almost no influence in making considerable decisions in society.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 511, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... who are over 60 years old. Even though all of the individual eligible young people votes,...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, third, thirdly, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, of course, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64721485411 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52324222609 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485411140584 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9016139143 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2105263158 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8421052632 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47368421053 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260996707492 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918309332357 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653854539097 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165013077312 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587343637573 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 511, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... who are over 60 years old. Even though all of the individual eligible young people votes,...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, third, thirdly, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, of course, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64721485411 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52324222609 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485411140584 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9016139143 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2105263158 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8421052632 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47368421053 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260996707492 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0918309332357 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653854539097 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165013077312 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587343637573 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.