Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Younger school children (aged five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, language, science and history.
Art and music are the greatest cultural inheritances from our ancestors and elites of our times. For children, starting to learn art and music can help them develop their ability, communicate with others and enjoy their life. In this sense, I agree with the statement for a number of reasons.
To start with, as is often pointed out, art and music can enhance children's ability of imagination, concentration and perseverance. Music is an expressive art of sound and the meaning of every musical note has unique profoundness which leaves our children unlimited scope of imagination. They could interpret the music they heard in their own way and that's why even a baby would move its body to a piece of music. What's more, in daily exercises, in order to perfect their skill and control every sound, children have to control themselves and attach more attention to music. That's how their concentration is improved. Finally, after years' unremitting efforts, they may attend some contests and, of course, if they really stick to music and are fond of it, some prizes will be given and more important, they learn a priceless lesson that perseverance will pay off.
Next, art and music can better children's disposition and temperament. The process of learning art and music can improve communication among students and teachers. They may express their emotion freely and establish a special bridge of communication with others. When they play a piece of music or paint a picture skillfully and beautifully, sense of self-achievement and activeness has been built up unconsciously. According to a recent survey made by Chinese Academy of Social Science, many children are becoming better-tempered, warmer, more generous, and more willing to help and communicate with others, after starting to learn art and music for a period of time.
Last but not least, art and music can heighten children's life quality and taste. An evaluation of high quality and taste is always given to art students, who always have a unique perspective towards many issues. The simple reason is that art comes from life and higher than life. Student learning art definitely enjoy life of higher quality than others. Besides, all masterpieces of famous musicians and painters should be the learning materials for the students. With the influence from those great figures in history, students' horizon will be certainly broader.
In sum, all the evidence confirms an undoubted conclusion that children aged from 5 to 10 should start to learn music and art. It will surely benefit their school life and life after.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, if, may, really, so, of course, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 13.8261648746 231% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10165484634 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78042125612 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548463356974 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.917154181 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0909090909 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2272727273 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09090909091 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196211702375 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671058396755 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405430594258 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12657562638 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0170031065103 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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