Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
A person should never make an important decision alone.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without the shadow of doubt famous people have always been under heavy presure because of intrest that others have in their life. As some people may think that since this group of people are attractive they do not deserve a private life, others may think vice versa. As far as I am concerned every one has a private aspect of life which should not be exposed to others. So I think they should have more privacy.
First and foremost, even though news about celebrities are a good source of income for magazines, revealing a person's personal life to a bulk porportion of society can cause a scandle for that person because most of the time reporters distort the news. There are things which can happen within the private life boundry and it is normal but having a majority of people knowing it is not pleasant for that person. An example can account my point. A friend of mine whose name is Billy is a singer in Iran and has numerous adherents but paparatzies are always around taking picture from him. Once he had a fight with his wife and as a result reporters were informed about it. The next day he saw that in magazines they had hit his wife which was not true. Also form that day for a long period people questined his reputation for a fake news.
Another reason one should take for this significant is it might cause them to leave their line of work in order to only find some peace. Having every one looking at your life can cause disturbance in one's life. An instance of this is what happened to a favoriate artist of mine whose name was Ali. He was a music composer and one of the brightest minds that I have ever seen. For a period of time in every newspaper was news of his private life such as where he was, when he met others. All these complexity in his life caused him to leave what he was doing best and one day he anounced that he will never again compose another music and was going to abondone his country. Since then no one knows where he is and what he does he do as a result the society lost one of its best artists.
To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons and examples advocate the fact that even celebritys need to have a privacy in their life becaus it can reveal facts in altered ways or even cause them to leave their work.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...vate life, others may think vice versa. As far as I am concerned every one has a p...
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...urce of income for magazines, revealing a persons personal life to a bulk porportion of s...
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Suggestion: Also,
...ey had hit his wife which was not true. Also form that day for a long period people ...
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...d hit his wife which was not true. Also form that day for a long period people quest...
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...d hit his wife which was not true. Also form that day for a long period people quest...
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...iod people questined his reputation for a fake news. Another reason one should take f...
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...test minds that I have ever seen. For a period of time in every newspaper was news of his priv...
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...s where he was, when he met others. All these complexity in his life caused him to leave what he...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, so, then, i think, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.34905660377 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19999008865 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514150943396 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6060684785 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0526315789 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3157894737 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78947368421 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0744870566106 0.236089414692 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0270795529949 0.076458572812 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0245335047088 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0454997475981 0.150856017488 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.010010821271 0.0645574589148 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.25 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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