In an era of dwindling budget, some universities and colleges are considering cutting fund for sports, like financial support for the school basketball team and the football team, and social activities, such as volunteer programs. However, I believe that this decision is shortsighted as well as harmful. I will elaborate on my ideas in the following paragraphs.
Sports are lifeblood for university life, and their significance is more outstanding in today's context. Nowadays, students lead a sedentary life, owing to the growing popularity of video games. When investigated, students report to preferring spending holidays in dormitories rather than on the playground, unless there are sports events on the campus. It is universities' adequate investment in sports that make high-quality, attractive sports event possible. Given the research above, these sport events even become the last chance that can lure a student out of his little dorm and run in the sunshine, breath in fresh air, and exercise their bodies. If campuses are going to cut down investment in sports, then it is evident that students' lifestyle will become even more unwholesome. As a result, students can have more feeble bodies. If there's arguments that classes and libraries, places for studying, is more important than sports, then note this: unhealthy physical condition can lead to worse class attendance and academic performance. This means that investment in sports ensures classes and libraries are used to their full potentials.
Social activities are equally important as classes and libraries. Social activities, including parties and movie events, give students a chance to gather and chat. Going to movies together enhances a person's friendship with his old friends, because the movie provides topics for discussion. The shared experience of laughing and being scared also creates a sense of intimacy between the friends. Parties allow students to meet people with similar interests and make new friends. For example, at a party celebrating the publishment of the latest Harry Potter, magic lovers can communicate about their exciting experience of watching the first Harry Porter movie, and their anticipation for the upcoming event. This is a unique experience that cannot be found in other places like classes and libraries, where people either only discuss about the textbook or are busying with their own task. The specialness of a Harry Porter gathering makes it a good chance for people with similar interest to meet and become friends.
In short, sports and social activities are as important as, if not more essential than, class and libraries to ensure school life is enjoyed and students can reach their full potential at school. This makes colleges' investments in sports and social activities vital, worthwhile and foresighted.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, then, well, while, for example, in short, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2394.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41628959276 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79649723722 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547511312217 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2604676271 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.818181818 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0909090909 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72727272727 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187057489039 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598581031024 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699364626869 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1233675381 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469166424524 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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